I'd like feedback on my article: Pumpkins.Cinderella's Coach.

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   Rachel Duerdenposted 4 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article? What can I do to improve? Thanks!
   Here is my article: Pumpkins.Cinderella's Coach. (must be signed in to view)

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      erorantesposted 4 years agoin reply to this

      Good morning miss Rachel Duerden. I was reading your article. Before you continue your writing. It is important that you read the hub Pages learning center. I like your information about pumpkins. You need a lot  of learning to do about the hub pages rules. Your article needs many things. I can tell you, but if I do. You will be confuse. So It is better to read the rules of hub pages.  You need three pictures. You need to organize your writing with the pictures. The pictures need to be relate to the words; you are writing.  Eventually after you learn the rules. You will be an excellent writer for hub pages. Welcome to hub pages.

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         Rachel Duerdenposted 4 years agoin reply to this

         Thank you very much for your response. It's very helpful and I'll keep going back to it.

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      Brenda Arledgeposted 4 years agoin reply to this

      Hi.  Since your article does not mention Cinderella's coach...although a witty title for a poem...it doesn't work here.
      Your article is about pumpkins.
      I think you need to insert photos between each part.
      Aldo include a few videos from you tube...like one on roasting seeds.

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         Rachel Duerdenposted 4 years agoin reply to this

         Wow, I've never thought of using videos from YouTube! Thank you so much for your feedback.

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   theraggededgeposted 4 years ago

   Hi Rachel,
   
   Several problems with this.
   
   Your title isn't formatted properly. And there are no mentions of Cinderella's coach in the text. The article is essentially 'facts about pumpkins' therefore the title should reflect that.
   
   Subtitles should be in title case, not upper case. There shouldn't be a full stop/period after a title or subtitle.
   
   References should be formatted correctly.
   
   The text has been published before on the blog that you link to. Articles on HubPages have to be original. Therefore, you will either have to delete this or completely rewrite it. It won't pass QAP as it is.
   
   Good luck.

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      Rachel Duerdenposted 4 years agoin reply to this

      Thank you very much for your help. I wasn't sure what I was doing before.

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