I'd like feedback on my article: Do you agree with the top 100 reasons why all..

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   Sravan Kumar Vasanthapuriposted 4 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article? What can I do to improve? Thanks!
   Here is my article: Do you agree with the top 100 reasons why all the lovers love their beloved? (must be signed in to view)

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      theraggededgeposted 4 years agoin reply to this

      Hi there,
      
      That's a very clunky title. And the title doesn't fit in with the 'top 100'. It's prose, rather than a list.
      
      And also the 'do you agree' part makes no sense.
      
      You have put a lot of emphasis on 'pretty' and 'cute' and absolutely none on intelligence, wit, and ambition, so it reads like girls are only good for one thing (pleasing their boyfriends) dressed up in cloying sweetness.

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         Sravan Kumar Vasanthapuriposted 4 years agoin reply to this

         Good evening madam. Thank you for your suggestion.

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      OldRosesposted 4 years agoin reply to this

      Your title asks two questions, but neither question is answered in your article.  To be successful on HubPages, you need to write facts.  Your article is creative writing.  Spend some time in the Learning Center (Help button, upper right) to learn how to properly format and write an article on this site.

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      Abby Slutskyposted 4 years agoin reply to this

      Your titles are not in APA format. I found them a little long too. I also would not use all the bold text.

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   AliciaCposted 4 years ago

   Hi. First, you need to remove the bold and italic formatting. Most of a HubPages article should be written in plain text. Only a small amount of another style should be used and only where necessary. In addition, your bio shouldn't be written entirely in capital letters.
   
   Next, you say you are going to give 100 reasons why people love their beloved, but there's no way to tell whether you did this because there are no numbers in the article.
   
   Although you've used some lovely descriptions in the article, the content doesn't seem very realistic to me. Many people who may not be considered attractive by the general public or who don't have a melodious voice fall in love. Maybe you mean that to people in love, their partners seem to be attractive and appear to have a lovely voice. In either case, I think if you switched the article to the creative writing category, it might be more successful.
   
   The source of a photo should state the name of the website that provided the image. You should also state the license of the photo. If you took the photograph yourself, you should say this.

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   Eric Cauncaposted 4 years ago

   Hi, my friend Stravan, Alicia is right. Your bio and your profile should not be all capitalized. We, Asian, we don't matter about the capitalization because it does not exist in our scripts, but in western culture, it's a big thing. Most of our readers are from the west, especially the Americans. We know, for them, the sentences that are entirely capitalized express "angriness". Avoid doing it because we don't know how your readers would comprehend your articles. Thank you. :-)

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   Brenda Arledgeposted 4 years ago

   Bold texts only on titles and shorten them if possible.
   Maybe add a couple videos.

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