I'd like feedback on my article: 5 Good Reasons to Visit the West End in...

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   citywalksposted 8 weeks ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article? What can I do to improve? Thanks!
   Here is my article: 5 Good Reasons to Visit the West End in Boston, and 1 Bad One

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   AliciaCposted 8 weeks ago

   Hi, Dominique. I think the main problem is the link to your website and the mention of its web address in your bio. We aren't supposed to promote our website on HubPages except in the designated area provided in our account settings.
   
   Another thing you might want to reconsider is the suggestion to readers in your first text capsule. It doesn't seem like a good idea to tell them that they may not want to read the rest of your article.

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   citywalksposted 8 weeks ago

   Thanks Alicia. I was afraid it was that (the link). I'll wait a little more to see what others are saying.

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      citywalksposted 8 weeks agoin reply to this

      In fact, I followed your advice and got rid of the link and the suggestion at the beginning. We'll see if it passes the QAP this time! Thanks again,

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   Abby Slutskyposted 8 weeks ago

   Hi,
   1. All of your titles are not in APA form.
   2. I think the content underneath your headings is very long. Make more subtitles with less content under them. It is easier to keep the reader interested that way.
   3. You can't have one bad reason and five good ones this way; it is either a bad reason because it is not a tourist attraction or a good reason because tourists do not go and it is off the beaten track. I'd make it a good reason and skip the bad reason.
   4. I think I would list your five reasons in the beginning, and then do a paragraph about each one under a subheading.
   5. I think the end of your intro is a bit redundant. Those are my only suggestions.
   6. I am not sure whether you took your pictures, but if not, you should probably mention the source.
   Good luck. Abby

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   citywalksposted 8 weeks ago

   Thanks Abby! I'm going to implement  some of your suggestions. And yes, I took the pictures but I could mention it, it cannot hurt!

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   Abby Slutskyposted 8 weeks ago

   My pleasure and welcome to HP.

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      citywalksposted 8 weeks agoin reply to this

      Hi Abby, I didn't used your advice in the end; when I went to modify my article, it was already published so I thought, no need to disturb it more, you never know! Thanks anyway, I'll keep them for another time.

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