I'd like feedback on my article: HOW TO MAKE FRIENDS EASILY – 8 HABITS YOU...

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   Owolabi Latifatposted 3 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article? What can I do to improve? Thanks!
   Here is my article: HOW TO MAKE FRIENDS EASILY – 8 HABITS YOU SHOULD ADOPT IN YOUR LIFE TO GET NEW FRIENDS

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      OldRosesposted 3 years agoin reply to this

      Since your title mentions 8 habits, then you should number them in the article.

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   AliciaCposted 3 years ago

   I have a few suggestions. The title shouldn't be written entirely in capital letters. I think you should try to avoid repeating the word "friends" and shorten the title.
   
   Your bio should be more specific. The article is unrelated to finances. It would be good if you included your experience or qualifications with respect to your topic.
   
   The titles of the eight habits should follow the same pattern. You've left out a period at the end of a sentence in some places. In addition, you have an incomplete paragraph near the end of the article.
   
   You should show that the photos have a suitable license for use on this site.

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   Miebakagh57posted 3 years ago

   8 Habits You Should Adopt To Making Friends Easily, should be an appropriate short title. Your article is great. But as the OldRoses said, and I agreed with her...give a numbering 1, 2, 3,...8 to the listing of the points.                                                      May I add that each of the factors should be insert into a capsule, to give the article a much nice appearance.

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      theraggededgeposted 3 years agoin reply to this

      'Make'.

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         Miebakagh57posted 3 years agoin reply to this

         Bev, 'Make'? Present perfect. Makimg friends is present cmtinuos tense.                                                 Both do AnswerThePublic and are search engine friendly.

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            theraggededgeposted 3 years agoin reply to this

            You suggested, "8 Habits You Should Adopt To Making Friends Easily".
            
            That's grammatically incorrect. It's '...To Make Friends...'.
            
            You wouldn't say, 'Tips to Help You Baking Bread Easily', would you?
            
            Sorry, Miebakagh, but it doesn't help people when you give them incorrect advice.

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               Miebakagh57posted 3 years agoin reply to this

               If I don't know, I'll pass over with a glance.                                                Make friends and making friends are both correct. Even if the later is not grammatically correct, it is at least search engine friendly.

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                  AliciaCposted 3 years agoin reply to this

                  The thing is, Miebakagh, if a grammatically incorrect title is one of the reasons why HubPages won't feature an article, it won't matter whether the title is good for search engines. If the article isn't featured, it won't attract much traffic.

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                     Miebakagh57posted 3 years agoin reply to this

                     Linda, I agree entirely to your last paragraphe. I won't in any way support ungrammatical statements in formal English.                                    But if the grammar may seems  informal, yet make sense in context. For example, to make fast buck is correct. Making fast money lacks formality.                                            I was in an English class many years ago. An informal sentense or grammar if it makes sense at least in context is acceptable.                                         Before making the suggestion for the title, I read through Afolabi's article. Toward the end, I pick 'making bread' there. Read the 8th list and see for yourself.                                         The words make, makes, and making are verbs. See the Oxford Advance Learners Dictinary.

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                        theraggededgeposted 3 years agoin reply to this

                        "8 Habits You Should Adopt To Making Friends Easily". is wrong. I don't know why you keep arguing for it. It's not 'informal'; it is incorrect and reads badly.
                        
                        We do know what verbs are but you used the wrong form. Any editor would either change or reject your suggestion.
                        
                        "To Make a Fast Buck" is correct (if you include the indefinite article). But "Methods To Adopt To Making a Fast Buck" is not. "Making Fast Money" is also correct, but not if you place "Methods To...".  in front of it.
                        
                        It's crazy hard for any ESL learner, I understand that. The problem is that small errors can make the difference between a good title/sentence and a grammatically incorrect one.

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                           Miebakagh57posted 3 years agoin reply to this

                           '8 Habits You Should Adopt To Making Friend Easily.' is wrong as you wrote.                                      But it's my suggestion which, I summed up from Awolabi's long title.                                             I beg you enlightened her  with a better title.

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   Owolabi Latifatposted 3 years ago

   Thank you all so much

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      Miebakagh57posted 3 years agoin reply to this

      Afolabi, great that you've modified the the title.                                       But the article still need a photo or two, a video, a callout, and a conclusion.                                       May I remind you that it's much better that each of the 8 points should be preferable insert into a  capsule as sub-heading or sub-title.

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         Jan Saintsposted 3 years agoin reply to this

         "insert" or "inserted"?

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            Miebakagh57posted 3 years agoin reply to this

            'inserted.'

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