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   Eric Cauncaposted 3 years ago

   https://discover.hubpages.com/education … odic-Table

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   eugbugposted 3 years ago

   I just had a quick look, but spotted a couple of errors. Your title "Application" should be "Applications" and "Some Experiments About the Reaction of Fluorine With Different Substances" could be changed to "Some Experiments Showing the Reaction of Fluorine With Different Substances" or maybe just "Experiments Showing the Reaction of Fluorine With Different Substances"
   Add some information about how fluorine is added to drinking water in some countries (water fluoridation) and how this can be controversial. The Wikipedia article has a Creative Commons map that you could add to your article. You might be able to find a photo of the tanks with skull and crossbones labels on them that the hydrofluoric acid is stored in at water treatment plants.

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   psycheskinnerposted 3 years ago

   Hi there.  If there is an audience for a basic summary of what an element is, this seems to do the job.  However, very basic subjects like this tend to be covered by other high authority sites that will always beat you for search engine placement (e.g. Wikipedia, academic websites).
   
   I would suggest thinking could making this article more attractive to people who want to learn about fluorine for more applied/practical reasons, or from a site that makes the information more entertaining and memorable.  For example, how is the use of fluorides controversial, and based on their actual chemical nature is it justified?  Is the use of fluorine for industrial purposes sustainable and non-destructive to the environment etc

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   AliciaCposted 3 years ago

   I think psycheskinner has raised some good points. Your article contains great information about fluorine, but I think in order to gain traffic it needs to have an original aspect, even if this aspect is just in the way in which you've presented the information. The title of your article and every reference that you've included begins with the word "Fluorine." That might cause people to think that your article is redundant.

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      Eric Cauncaposted 3 years agoin reply to this

      Can I cite the reference to something like this?
      
      Fluorine (F). (1998-2022). Lenntech. https://www. lenntech .com/ periodic/ elements/ f.htm

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   eugbugposted 3 years ago

   If the article starts to rank and gain reasonable traffic, you could write guides about the other halogens and them all together.

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   Eric Cauncaposted 3 years ago

   Thank you for taking the time to provide feedback. I'll take your advice in my next article. Is there a possibility that this article will be moved to Owlcation? Thanks.

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   eugbugposted 3 years ago

   Hi Eric, I see the article has been moved to Owlcation. Here's a few additional grammar corrections you could make.
   
   In the paragraph below, change "the chemical" to "a chemical". Also change "condensates" to "condenses". Condensate is a noun and refers to something that has condensed.
   
   "Fluorine is the chemical element with the symbol F and atomic number 9. Its atom is the third smallest among all elements with an atomic radius of 153 pm. It has 9 electrons that surround the nucleus of its atom — 7 in its outer shell, and 2 in its inner shell. Its atomic weight is 18.998403 and its density is 0.001696 g/cm3.
   
   Fluorine usually exists in the form of a pale-yellow gas at room temperature. It has a strong odor and is often described as having a "pungent" smell. It condensates into bright yellow liquid at -188.12 °C. Fluorine solidifies into soft and transparent crystals at -219.6 °C and becomes very hard and opaque at -228°C"
   
   In this paragraph, I would replace "is the production of" with "is in the production of"
   
   "Fluorine has a wide range of applications and its common use is the production of sodium fluoride. Sodium fluoride is one of the ingredients added to toothpaste. It is beneficial for the prevention of tooth decay. Fluorine is essential in the production of aluminum, dye, ceramics, and fluorochemicals such as solvents and superplastics.
   
   It is also used in a variety of industries, including petrochemicals, etching glass and enamel, cable insulation, smelting flux, and agricultural chemicals. Fluorine is also an important chemical in the manufacture of nuclear weapons"
   
   I would rearrange this caption on a photograph. So you say:
   
   "Sodium fluoride, one of the compounds of fluorine, which is one of the toothpaste's ingredients is helpful to reduce the risk of tooth decay."
   
   to
   
   "Sodium fluoride is one of the compounds of fluorine and used as an ingredient in toothpaste to help prevent tooth decay"

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   Eric Cauncaposted 3 years ago

   Thank you for your help.

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