I'd like feedback on my article: Why Is the Lion the King of the Forest?

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   Darsonik Boseposted 2 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article? What can I do to improve? Thanks!
   Here is my article: Why Is the Lion the King of the Forest?

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      theraggededgeposted 2 years agoin reply to this

      Lions live on plains and not in forests. They are not jungle creatures. This basic fact completely negates your title. You mention their habitat later, but your title should be an accurate reflection of the topic.
      
      https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Lion
      
      Can I suggest you fix your other article before asking for more feedback?

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         Darsonik Boseposted 2 years agoin reply to this

         Yes, thanks, but how?

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            theraggededgeposted 2 years agoin reply to this

            By editing your article according to the advice you have been given.

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               Darsonik Boseposted 2 years agoin reply to this

               Ok

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      Miebakagh57posted 2 years agoin reply to this

      Hey there, the title of your article sounds more as a statement than a question.                                              But critcally, you've got to format your write-up according to hubpages magazine sytle. Put your text sub-titles into various text capsules, includimg the introduction, conclusion, and the sources of books and eecyclopddia you consulted.                                       Seriously, you copy: 'The lion is a muscular, broad-chested cat with round ears' from Wikipedia. But you should put that into a quotation mark (single or double. Or rather into a 'callout' capsule.                                     Critically again, the comparativeness of the lions intelligency, brain size, strenght, etc with other beasts is commendable, and  predominates more than what the title says. It should be the other way round. So, you've got to put more detail into the topic. Much thanks.

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   AliciaCposted 2 years ago

   Your article could be very interesting, but it’s spoiled by some errors or incomplete information. I notice that you’ve changed the title to remove the word “forest,” as theraggededge suggested. Now you need to change the text in the body of your article that says lions live in the forest, since they generally don’t. If some lions or some jackals do live in the forest, however, you should mention the exceptions. You should also check that the habitat is really forest instead of open woodland.
   
   If you read and added references, you would be unlikely to make mistakes. References should always be added to factual articles unless a writer has training and qualifications in a subject. I’ve noticed that even some professionals add references if the subject is out of their narrow range of expertise, though. 
   
   Sometimes new discoveries are made, and references sometimes have to be changed or deleted, but that’s part of the job of a writer of informative articles.

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      Miebakagh57posted 2 years agoin reply to this

      In the same reference,  Wikipedia, Bev referred to, and which am familiar with because I wrote an article about a lion breed or Liger, certain  'King  Lion' also habits the mountain top and precincts of rivers and lakes. Some lions even love to go upon trees. Thanks.

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         AliciaCposted 2 years agoin reply to this

         I was trying to be tactful in my post. Most lions live on the plains, but not all of them do. Your article sounds interesting.

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   Darsonik Boseposted 2 years ago

   Is there any issue in the last picture of this article?

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      AliciaCposted 2 years agoin reply to this

      There’s an issue with all of the photos, Darsonik. They must have a public domain or a Creative Commons commercial license. You must show the source of each photo as well as the license.
      
      The article from the HubPages Learning Center in the link below should be helpful.
      
      https://hubpageshelp.com/content/Learni … -image-use

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         Darsonik Boseposted 2 years agoin reply to this

         Is the topic of this article which I have chosen is okay?

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            AliciaCposted 2 years agoin reply to this

            Yes, I think the topic could be a good one.

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   FatFreddysCatposted 2 years ago

   Lions don't live in forests.
   
   Based on that alone, I saw no need to read any further.

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   AliciaCposted 2 years ago

   I notice that the writer lives in India. To be fair to him, there is a group of Asiatic lions that live in the Gir Forest in western India. According to the Zoological Society of London video in the link below, the trees are not as dense as in what is generally considered to be a forest in many other places, but they are present. It would have been helpful if the writer had explained the differences between Asiatic and African lions.
   
   https://www.zsl.org/conservation/region … gir-forest

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      Miebakagh57posted 2 years agoin reply to this

      Linda, now that you've point out this to all here, it becomes Darsonik's responsibility to re-do the write.                                    Thanks for visiting my Liger story.

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