I'd like feedback on my article: 6 Remedies for Migraine

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   Justine Guiaoposted 2 years ago

   Hello, fellow hubbers!
   
   I would like to ask for your help to improve my article. I submitted this article to PatientLounge, but it was rejected, and the editor asked me to improve the article's grammar and use of punctuation.
   
   I have already edited it and used Grammarly to assist me. Since English is not my primary language, I would like to ask for your feedback before I resubmit it.
   
   Thank you in advance!

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      theraggededgeposted 2 years agoin reply to this

      Here is the correct link: https://discover.hubpages.com/health/Ho … h-Migraine
      
      I suspect that it hasn't been accepted to Patients' Lounge because the topic has already been covered in depth.
      
      https://patientslounge.com/pain/5-Thing … -Migraines
      
      https://patientslounge.com/pain/Migrain … -and-Ideas

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         Justine Guiaoposted 2 years agoin reply to this

         You're probably right. Thank you for your insight, Bev!

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      Miebakagh57posted 2 years agoin reply to this

      Hey there, this is a health issue. I read through the first 3 paragraph, and realise that you're tell us what a maigrane is.                                   You should define and explain that right from the first sentence.                                  Grammarly will not h

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      Miebakagh57posted 2 years agoin reply to this

      Hey there, in the first paragraph, define an explain migraine. Grammarly will not do that. I agree with the other writers on issues affecting your article. Thanks.

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   PaulGoodman67posted 2 years ago

   I think Bev (raggededge) is right that it's a saturated topic. So it may be doomed from the start for that reason.
   
   The article is not bad, but I could highlight a few things that I thought might be better:
   
   * Some of the paragraphs are too long, HP recommends three sentences. This is to make it easier to read on a smartphone
   * The article needs way more reference links to back up the advice. Giving out medical information needs big-time support. Having just two sources at the end isn't enough imho.
   * It switches between personal experience and giving out medical advice. That's not wrong, just not always an easy thing to pull off.
   
   Firstly, from a writing perspective, regularly switching between the first person and the third person can be awkward and requires special care.
   
   Generally speaking, any medical advice that's being handed out by a non-professional needs to be done carefully, particularly if you're recommending certain drugs. I'm not saying that you're wrong, it's just harder to gain the trust of the reader.
   
   I'm assuming no relevant medical qualification from reading the bio, which points to a specialism in psychology. Being a sufferer and writing from that perspective is one thing, handing out medical advice goes into a greyer and more challenging area.

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      Justine Guiaoposted 2 years agoin reply to this

      Thank you for the points, Paul! I might just do some additional editing based on your points, then I'll leave it as it is. It is that kind of article that I'd like to share, anyway. Thanks again!

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         PaulGoodman67posted 2 years agoin reply to this

         There's a thing called "YMYL," which stands for Your Money Your Life. It's basically content that covers important things like finances and health, things that can change a person's life.
         
         Both Google and HubPages treat YMYL topics super seriously and articles are subjected to greater scrutiny than most other topics. That's why I mentioned more links to respected medical sites.
         
         You seem to have great qualifications and a lot of interests. You may find it easier to find success in another area.
         
         For instance, if you write something involving psychology, you can mention your degree and experience. It doesn't have to be an academic, probably better if it's aimed at an everyday audience, but you'll have authority.
         
         That's just a suggestion. My feeling is that if you write an article about another topic you'll find it easier to get into the niches.
         
         Often practical how-to articles work well here, too.
         
         You have the writing skills, but I agree with some of the others that you are making it more of a challenge with the topic you chose in this case.

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            Justine Guiaoposted 2 years agoin reply to this

            Thank you for your insights and taking the time to read the article and construct this feedback. This is much appreciated!
            
            I do find my thing on PairedLife and all (so far) of my articles, that are intended to that niche site, are being accepted. I also have a plan  on creating articles about mental health and well-being for the general audience in the future.

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   AliciaCposted 2 years ago

   I think you’ve created a very good article with some great information and suggestions, though I see one area that needs improvement. My sister experiences migraines, so I’ve done some research into the topic.
   
   You say that there is no cure for migraines at the moment and that we must learn to live with the disorder. You also say that migraines will exist throughout the sufferer’s life. You may be right to some extent and for certain people. Medical scientists are exploring migraines, however, and new treatments are being created that help some people. In addition, we can’t say that future researchers won’t discover additional treatments that help more people or even cure the disease. You do mention that doctors may prescribe medicines that affect the brain, but this is after you’ve said that we must learn to live with the disorder.
   
   I’m not suggesting that you say that the medicines or the new and future treatments will help a particular migraine sufferer or cure their disorder, since this is uncertain, or that you discuss the treatments in detail. It would be good for people to know that their condition isn’t being ignored by researchers, though.

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      Justine Guiaoposted 2 years agoin reply to this

      I honestly forgot about this point. Thank you for bringing it up! I will add this on my next edit for this article. Thank you again, Alicia.

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   eugbugposted 2 years ago

   My article on migraine on Remedygrove only received 33 views last year, so I guess the Google Site Diversity thing is possibly resulting in only one of those migraine articles per site being listed in SERPS. It's probably in the site's interests not to duplicate articles for fear of retribution from Google.

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