Okay guys I have 21 hubs in 4 days Criticize me! (especially content!)

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   brianzenposted 13 years ago

   I am asking not for adoration but for honesty what do you think of my material?

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      brianzenposted 13 years agoin reply to this

      http://hubpages.com/hub/meditations-2

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         brianzenposted 13 years agoin reply to this

         http://hubpages.com/hub/Hardcore-meditation

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            brianzenposted 13 years agoin reply to this

            http://hubpages.com/hub/Crazyzen

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               brianzenposted 13 years agoin reply to this

               http://hubpages.com/hub/Dark-Zen

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      Faybe Bayposted 13 years agoin reply to this

      I 'll be checking them out Brianzen. I thought I told you about this before, maybe it was someone else. I am always trying to get people to post in the correct thread. I gave up and started sending e-mails.

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         brianzenposted 13 years agoin reply to this

         Oh I was asking about the newer stuff,

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   Cagsilposted 13 years ago

   You asked me to check out your hubs.
   
   However, no one within HubPages is going to be willing to check out 21 in one shot. That was the reason I told you to post a link in the other forum.
   
   Please select up 3 hubs for review at most. Whichever you want reviewed. Yes, I realize you want them all reviewed? However, what you are told about the ones you put forth, can be used as a guideline for others.
   
   So, I'll say it again. Post at least 3 links for review. Thank you.

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      brianzenposted 13 years agoin reply to this

      Sorry I got an important call, My bad.

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         Cagsilposted 13 years agoin reply to this

         Not a problem

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         Faybe Bayposted 13 years agoin reply to this

         Okay, you know I am all about the brownies, so you know I read that one. Before you posted these links I read and commented on another one, it was about pushing through failure, which I really needed so thank you.
         
         Now as an editor, i looked at these three. I have a friend who writes like you do, intense, passionate and with your own voice. It sounds as if you are actually there coaching. That is great as you are a coach.
         
         Layout wise, you need to look. Some of your sentences are indented to a point where it starts halfway across the page. Some of your sentences don't line up.
         
         I am not detracting from your work, believe me I am no critic. What I am is a reader. i will read it however you put it out there, but to be taken seriously as a writer, you need to make sure your spaces, sentences capitalization and so on are correct. I could read your hubs all day long, but if you want to get into the status of a Nelle Hoxie, who makes a lot of money after only a year, then you need to read some hubs by the pros, and then look at yours with a fresh eye.

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            brianzenposted 13 years agoin reply to this

            Thank you so much so it isn't awful. That is wonderful to hear from you, I really like yours as well.

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   Cagsilposted 13 years ago

   This hub looks a mess.
   
   http://hubpages.com/hub/meditations-2
   
   (a) You have paragraphs that are not properly formatted.
   (b) You don't have enough keywords/tags(9-15 recommended)
   (c) You've written everything in one capsule.
   (d) You've not written enough- meaning it is too short. Hubs should be about 800-1200 words or more.
   
   I like the topic of meditation, for which, I pay no mind to, because it borderlines mysticism, but it was an interesting read.

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      brianzenposted 13 years agoin reply to this

      Got it, Thanks!

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   Cagsilposted 13 years ago

   This one is a mess, like the other.
   
   http://hubpages.com/hub/Hardcore-meditation
   
   All same related issues.

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      brianzenposted 13 years agoin reply to this

      Yes I think I need to work on how I break them up, I never got the hang of it. but still great advice thank you very much!

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         brianzenposted 13 years agoin reply to this

         So the call was actually just a false alarm my aunt thought she had a prowler, My shoes are soaked now and it was just some kid looking for his dog.

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         Faybe Bayposted 13 years agoin reply to this

         I went and found the Numero uno guy on the list and an exercise hb as example for you.
         
         http://hubpages.com/hub/Maintaining-Wei … h-Exercise

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            brianzenposted 13 years agoin reply to this

            Thank you so much, I really mean it that's so nice!

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   Cagsilposted 13 years ago

   Believe it or not, it wouldn't be too much trouble, but check out some of this forum thread, at some of the critiquing done on other people's hubs and see if you can notice the changes people have made, by the advice given out.
   
   That might help you out too. Good luck. Need anymore, come to this forum. Not necessarily this thread, but you could use this one again I suppose.

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      brianzenposted 13 years agoin reply to this

      Hey thanks again brother, By the way I actually am reading yours too. (in case you were curious,) and I wonder if I am on to something here? Do you actually know most of these people who are commenting? where is the "outside commenter's?" area or can only hubbers comment?

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         Faybe Bayposted 13 years agoin reply to this

         Anyone can comment. Sign out and go to a page, to comment you have to put in a name is all. My Uncle comments sometimes.

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            brianzenposted 13 years agoin reply to this

            Again thank you.

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         Cagsilposted 13 years agoin reply to this

         Most of the time I see people commenting on my hub, for which, I already know. Every so often I get others, who I don't really know. There are not too many comments I get from outsiders of HubPages.
         
         So far, the 5 comments I've received from outside sources were completely and thoroughly rude/abusive, so they were deleted.
         
         I refuse to put people anger words on my hub. I'm not an idiot or a moron, nor am I filled with an ego the size of Texas. I do at times come across like that, but I chalk it up to other people's subjective view or bias. Which, makes no difference on my writing.

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            brianzenposted 13 years agoin reply to this

            I am sorry I really like your topics, you are a great writer and people are too opinionated to appreciate it. Your stuff rocks

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   princess gposted 13 years ago

   I like your writing style. It's refreshing and real.

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      brianzenposted 13 years agoin reply to this

      Thank you and I love your art.

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   stay_home_mommy3posted 13 years ago

   Hi
   I'm not a professional, so the mistakes I see are probably the same ones I make
   You wright well, you have passion, and I think for many that's the hard part.  So, that's awesome.
   I agree that the hub I read was somewhat messy, which will make a reader not want to read it.  Also, some of your sentences are kind of long, but that might be a personal thing.  I think that the grammatical part of writing can be aweful to figure out.  One thing I do that helps me, is when you start a new thought, put that in a new calpsule. 
   Anyway, keep writing, you are doing an awesome job!

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      brianzenposted 13 years agoin reply to this

      Thank you so much!

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         Faybe Bayposted 13 years agoin reply to this

         And as usual all the ladies flocking in. I told you, you are a good writer, we got the message. The rest is all marketability. You write with a voice we can hear in our heads, that's the most important part. It sounds like you're talking to us, not at us.

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            brianzenposted 13 years agoin reply to this

            I am just astonished as I really only ever wrote poetry when I was young, and a few handwritten books that I never did much with so this is all high praise to me.

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