Constructive Criticism

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  1. ns1209 profile image69
    ns1209posted 8 years ago

    Hi, I think I am doing OK on Hubpages however I would quite like a few people just to check if I am doing everything OK and what could be improved! 

    I suppose I would like this hub checked the most http://hubpages.com/hub/Buy-Kinect hub

    Thanks for any help on any other my hubs and any constructive criticism is welcomed!

    1. climberjames profile image55
      climberjamesposted 8 years agoin reply to this

      Hmm the link does not appear to be working?

    2. AdrienneM profile image51
      AdrienneMposted 8 years agoin reply to this

      Hi ns1209,

      Is is possible hub removed our content because you were selling this product Kinect?  It seems to show that the page does not exist.

    3. AdrienneM profile image51
      AdrienneMposted 8 years agoin reply to this

      Okaaay thanks to Joe8943 I found it and I agree it a very good article. It gives just what it says it will, after reading I was thinking about making a purchase.  Of course I have to agree with him...there are grammar issues, minor, but you might want to proof read more than once.  First to see if the reading makes sense, then to check for spelling and like that.  That always helps me.
      Adrienne Michel
      P.S. I would sure appreciate if you could do the same for me. There has got to be a reason that I can't get any comments.  Boring? To Confused?
      http://hubpages.com/hub/myownwealthyaffiliatereview and http://hubpages.com/hub/first-date-communication-tips

  2. Joe8943 profile image73
    Joe8943posted 8 years ago

    If this is the one your talking about http://hubpages.com/hub/Buy-Kinect I thought it was good, a few grammar and spelling errors but well written.  You might also want the bigger picture of the Kinect on the top versus the Amazon capsule, the small picture is a little distracting.  Plus not many people would even click on the Amazon capsule until reading the article anyway so having it lower may also help clicks.

  3. ns1209 profile image69
    ns1209posted 8 years ago

    Yes Joe that was the one I was talking about - sorry the link does not work!

    Moved the bigger picture up and the amazon one down - thanks for the advice.

  4. Joe8943 profile image73
    Joe8943posted 8 years ago

    no problem, a second set of eyes always helps

  5. climberjames profile image55
    climberjamesposted 8 years ago

    Looks good to me smile

    I would swap the first picture to the second text module if it was mine.

    I like to keep the right hand first ad unit right at the top, but that's just me smile

  6. ns1209 profile image69
    ns1209posted 8 years ago

    OK thanks for the advice.

  7. Jeff Berndt profile image90
    Jeff Berndtposted 8 years ago

    Here's a suggestion:

    This sentence:

    "Kinect is not instead of controllers, it is to complement them and give the Xbox 360 the best control system around."

    is awkwardly constructed. Perhaps a smoother construction would be:

    "Kinect is not meant to replace controllers but to complement them...."

    or perhaps:

    "Kinect does not replace controllers; it complements them, giving the ...."

    Best of luck!

  8. Marisa Wright profile image96
    Marisa Wrightposted 8 years ago

    Your first three paragraphs are too rambling.  If you want to sell Kinect boxes, you have to get to the point much faster.

    The tip about keeping the top right-hand corner free for Adsense ads is spot-on - that's your prime spot for people to click.  If you're not signed up for Adsense, put your Amazon ads there.

  9. Aficionada profile image85
    Aficionadaposted 8 years ago

    AdrienneM,

    For me, it took a while before the comments started coming.  Don't give up!  I don't know why some Hubs get comments and others don't, but it does seem to happen that way.

 
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