I know I could probably write more effectively, but sometimes I have a hard time articulating what I want to say. I find myself using the same words too often, I have a hard time with my titles, and I don't know if I could say the same thing with less words-less explaining. If someone could give me a few tips, I would be so grateful!
I looked at a few of your hubs. I don't think you have the problem of using too many words to say something.
Here is an example of "using too many words," and this is from one of my own forum posts! I could have edited this, but chose not to, for some reason:
"I have a good friend (not a hubber) who has great and big and marvelous thoughts about marketing concepts, but who cannot write anything without punctuation, spelling, or other errors."
In this sentence, the marketing concepts and the big and beautiful thoughts are one and the same thing. I need to change it, to be less redundant.
This sentence would read much better this way: "I have a good friend (not a hubber) who has developed some big and beautiful marketing concepts, but who cannot write anything without punctuation, spelling, or other errors."
Your Pet Stores and Puppy Mills hub is admirably succinct, and just the kind of thing that will make animal lovers cry, but I believe it would be more readable if you broke up the text into more paragraphs, especially at the beginning. A better conclusion would have pulled the whole hub together. The conclusion can be difficult to write. I know. I'm always better at introductions, rather than conclusions. Besides asking readers what they think, there could be a call to action -- like, for instance, telling your readers to boycott any pet store that makes a practice of buying from puppy mills (you don't have to name names of current stores, though!)
As for descriptive writing, you can improve in this area as well. An online thesaurus will help. It's not the easiest thing in the world to come up with unique analogies and metaphors. I'm not particularly good at it either. It takes practice, and maybe a little time spent writing poetry.
Good luck.
Thank you so much for taking the time to help!! I am also going to check out some other hubs on the subject as well.
I looked over your "where to find inventory to sell online" hub
http://casmerchant.hubpages.com/hub/How … ise-online
I see that you tweaked the title as it's very different from the URL now. I think you tweaked it a little too much as it no longer matches the hub itself.
The organization needs a bit of improvement. You need to "hook" the readers by piquing their interest with the first paragraph, then show them a bunch of bullet points on what they can expect, and finally, explain each of the bullet points. You didn't do any of that.
Your hub doesn't really discuss how to find stuff to sell, but instead, talks about how to sell WITHOUT eBay. The only part about inventory is when you suggest making your own stuff through crafting for sale. Thus, it doesn't fit the title (or the title doesn't fit the hub).
Thank you. Sometimes it seems its the most obvious things that slip right by me.
It's hard to pick which Hub you would like help with when there's no url. You're allowed to post the url in THIS forum.
I checked your 4th of July hub. It lists a recipe and no other information. I would suggest, list key points in point form, try to write answering the 5 W's, how and add a recommendation/conclusion plus touch of humor. Write a final copy based upon your list and you should now have a nice article.
http://casmerchant.hubpages.com/hub/Qui … ly-dessert
by Cas Merchant 13 years ago
I was wondering if someone more experienced in writing could critique some of my hubs?I know I could probably write more effectively, but sometimes I have a hard time articulating what I want to say. I find myself using the same words too often, I have a hard time with my titles, and I don't know...
by shadeofgrey 17 years ago
Hi Everybody -Ive only created two hubs so far - but my intent is to cover as many topics as possible in two seperate catagories -- issues faced by parents that have just found out their child is disabled - and the implications of growing up in mdern america with a permanent dfisability. my...
by Catherine Mostly 11 years ago
Why do Hub writers not appreciate literary critique to improve their craft?I wrote a suggestion in the forum yesterday about adding the ability to include MINOR feedback to authors while rating articles in the Hub Hopper. I know peeps can get rude with critiques - but I think that can be minimized....
by Wendy Iturrizaga 14 years ago
Hello everyone. This week's HubMob is very special as it is going to be the last HubMob run by your usual HubMob team. For a variety of personal reasons your HubMob team is in need of taking a break. But before we run our last HubMob we want to let you know that it was a pleasure...
by Lena Welch 13 years ago
How much time does it take you to write a hub?
by northweststarr 14 years ago
A common problem for all writers, taking other peoples' suggestions and criticisms gracefully is essential to the process. I personally, welcome any and all advice from my readers that is constructive and true. I find that my work improves dramatically and I'm more interested if discussions result...
Copyright © 2025 The Arena Media Brands, LLC and respective content providers on this website. HubPages® is a registered trademark of The Arena Platform, Inc. Other product and company names shown may be trademarks of their respective owners. The Arena Media Brands, LLC and respective content providers to this website may receive compensation for some links to products and services on this website.
Copyright © 2025 Maven Media Brands, LLC and respective owners.
As a user in the EEA, your approval is needed on a few things. To provide a better website experience, hubpages.com uses cookies (and other similar technologies) and may collect, process, and share personal data. Please choose which areas of our service you consent to our doing so.
For more information on managing or withdrawing consents and how we handle data, visit our Privacy Policy at: https://corp.maven.io/privacy-policy
Show DetailsNecessary | |
---|---|
HubPages Device ID | This is used to identify particular browsers or devices when the access the service, and is used for security reasons. |
Login | This is necessary to sign in to the HubPages Service. |
Google Recaptcha | This is used to prevent bots and spam. (Privacy Policy) |
Akismet | This is used to detect comment spam. (Privacy Policy) |
HubPages Google Analytics | This is used to provide data on traffic to our website, all personally identifyable data is anonymized. (Privacy Policy) |
HubPages Traffic Pixel | This is used to collect data on traffic to articles and other pages on our site. Unless you are signed in to a HubPages account, all personally identifiable information is anonymized. |
Amazon Web Services | This is a cloud services platform that we used to host our service. (Privacy Policy) |
Cloudflare | This is a cloud CDN service that we use to efficiently deliver files required for our service to operate such as javascript, cascading style sheets, images, and videos. (Privacy Policy) |
Google Hosted Libraries | Javascript software libraries such as jQuery are loaded at endpoints on the googleapis.com or gstatic.com domains, for performance and efficiency reasons. (Privacy Policy) |
Features | |
---|---|
Google Custom Search | This is feature allows you to search the site. (Privacy Policy) |
Google Maps | Some articles have Google Maps embedded in them. (Privacy Policy) |
Google Charts | This is used to display charts and graphs on articles and the author center. (Privacy Policy) |
Google AdSense Host API | This service allows you to sign up for or associate a Google AdSense account with HubPages, so that you can earn money from ads on your articles. No data is shared unless you engage with this feature. (Privacy Policy) |
Google YouTube | Some articles have YouTube videos embedded in them. (Privacy Policy) |
Vimeo | Some articles have Vimeo videos embedded in them. (Privacy Policy) |
Paypal | This is used for a registered author who enrolls in the HubPages Earnings program and requests to be paid via PayPal. No data is shared with Paypal unless you engage with this feature. (Privacy Policy) |
Facebook Login | You can use this to streamline signing up for, or signing in to your Hubpages account. No data is shared with Facebook unless you engage with this feature. (Privacy Policy) |
Maven | This supports the Maven widget and search functionality. (Privacy Policy) |
Marketing | |
---|---|
Google AdSense | This is an ad network. (Privacy Policy) |
Google DoubleClick | Google provides ad serving technology and runs an ad network. (Privacy Policy) |
Index Exchange | This is an ad network. (Privacy Policy) |
Sovrn | This is an ad network. (Privacy Policy) |
Facebook Ads | This is an ad network. (Privacy Policy) |
Amazon Unified Ad Marketplace | This is an ad network. (Privacy Policy) |
AppNexus | This is an ad network. (Privacy Policy) |
Openx | This is an ad network. (Privacy Policy) |
Rubicon Project | This is an ad network. (Privacy Policy) |
TripleLift | This is an ad network. (Privacy Policy) |
Say Media | We partner with Say Media to deliver ad campaigns on our sites. (Privacy Policy) |
Remarketing Pixels | We may use remarketing pixels from advertising networks such as Google AdWords, Bing Ads, and Facebook in order to advertise the HubPages Service to people that have visited our sites. |
Conversion Tracking Pixels | We may use conversion tracking pixels from advertising networks such as Google AdWords, Bing Ads, and Facebook in order to identify when an advertisement has successfully resulted in the desired action, such as signing up for the HubPages Service or publishing an article on the HubPages Service. |
Statistics | |
---|---|
Author Google Analytics | This is used to provide traffic data and reports to the authors of articles on the HubPages Service. (Privacy Policy) |
Comscore | ComScore is a media measurement and analytics company providing marketing data and analytics to enterprises, media and advertising agencies, and publishers. Non-consent will result in ComScore only processing obfuscated personal data. (Privacy Policy) |
Amazon Tracking Pixel | Some articles display amazon products as part of the Amazon Affiliate program, this pixel provides traffic statistics for those products (Privacy Policy) |
Clicksco | This is a data management platform studying reader behavior (Privacy Policy) |