I'd like feedback on my Hub: Recipe for Lamb Rib Soup

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   cheeluarvposted 9 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my Hub Recipe for Lamb Rib Soup. What can I do to improve? Thanks!

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      calculus-geometryposted 9 years agoin reply to this

      Looks like a good recipe. Find a friend who is fluent in English to help you correct the grammar mistakes.

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         cheeluarvposted 9 years agoin reply to this

         Thank you so much for the help.

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      Marcy Goodfleischposted 9 years agoin reply to this

      The recipe looks good, and the pictures are appealing.
      
      As others mentioned here, have someone check your English and punctuation. Commas, periods and parenthesis need a space afterward. 
      
      Also - did you use the Recipe Capsule?  I am not sure what the QAP flagged here, but perhaps it is not long enough as a 'regular' hub. Recipe hubs can have fewer words (although you do need some text in addition to the actual recipe).
      
      Good luck - I hope you find whatever the problem might be and that it's easy to correct!

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         cheeluarvposted 9 years agoin reply to this

         Thank you so much for the review,do whatever you said to improve its quality.

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   SmartAndFunposted 9 years ago

   I agree with the first response; incorrect, broken English is this article's main problem. Running it through a spell/grammar checker can help somewhat, but it would be best to also have it reviewed by someone who is fluent in English.
   
   Once you have that fixed, read over it carefully and put a space after every period and comma. I don't see spaces after the any of the periods, and only a few after commas.

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      cheeluarvposted 9 years agoin reply to this

      Thanks a lot  for pointing out my mistakes and tips to correct them. Have a great  day!

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   melissae1963posted 9 years ago

   I'm agreeing with the other readers. The recipe is a good one. It has everything that a cook needs to make the dish. The first section is not grammatically correct. I also noticed the lack of spaces between end punctuation. Also, there is a lack of voice (I sometimes call it "sparkle" with my students). Why do you like this recipe? Is it a family recipe? Do you make it often? Who might enjoy this recipe? Is it easy to make? Is it for busy weeknights or more of a weekend meal?
   
   I hope I've helped you with your revisions.
   
   Melissa

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      cheeluarvposted 9 years agoin reply to this

      Wow, great , your tips  were really helpful and useful. Hope after all  the corrections were made, my recipe will have that "sparkle" to read. Thank you so much.

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         melissae1963posted 9 years agoin reply to this

         You are more than welcome.

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   moviesreviewsposted 9 years ago

   It looks like the article is unpublished right now

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      cheeluarvposted 9 years agoin reply to this

      Started correction,  because of some other urgent work, can't continue saved it as unpublished right now.

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         moviesreviewsposted 9 years agoin reply to this

         oh ok, I thought you might have been unaware

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            cheeluarvposted 9 years agoin reply to this

            thank you

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