I'd like to know why my article was not published

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   Sherry Hposted 6 years ago

   Can someone help me figure out the improvements I need to make in my article
   https://hubpages.com/health/10-Womens-F … Motivation
   Is it about grammar or the links?

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   Marisa Wrightposted 6 years ago

   Is that the link in the email they sent you?  You need to use the link they give, otherwise we can't see it.

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   Sherry Hposted 6 years ago

   this is the link http://hubpages.com/forum/newtopic/cate … Motivation

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      Marisa Wrightposted 6 years agoin reply to this

      No, that's the forum link.

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   Sherry Hposted 6 years ago

   14 Women's Fitness Instructors To Follow (must be signed in to view). What can I do to improve? Thanks!

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   Marisa Wrightposted 6 years ago

   Curated lists work very well on blogs and websites, but HubPages doesn't like them unless you add real value.  Here, there's no sign of that - it's just a list of links.  You're not helping the reader decide which is the most appropriate for their needs, or expressing any kind of opinion on any of them. 
   
   If you think about it, anyone can easily find a list of 14 fitness sites to follow on Google.  What people want is some guidance on which one they should choose, based on their needs.
   
   You might get away with it if, instead of hyperlinking "Youtube channel" each time, you insert a video capsule and show one of the instructor's videos.  That would reduce the number of links in the article.

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   Sherry Hposted 6 years ago

   Thank you Marisa, your suggestions are really valuable. Now I get it why it was not accepted. I'll make these changes, hopefully.

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   Sherry Hposted 6 years ago

   And if you could, please check an another article of mine. It's not that important though, because I decided to delete it anyway. But I just want to know why it was unaccepted to learn how HP works. Thank you so much.
   Know Your Nutrition Facts Label

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      theraggededgeposted 6 years agoin reply to this

      Hi there,
      
      I took a look at it... it was very hard to read because of the numbers and percentage signs. Numbers under 10 look better written in full, and % should be written as 'percent'.
      
      This paragraph for example:
      
      "Note: Calories you take everyday comes from carbohydrates, proteins and fats. 4 grams of carbohydrates gives 4 grams of calories, similarly 4 grams of proteins gives 4 grams of calories while "4 grams of fat gives 9 grams of calories"."
      
      Why pick four? Why not one? You don't explain how four grams of fat can give nine grams of calories. That goes against the laws of physics. Surely calories can't be weighed as they are a measure of energy? And why enclose the last bit in quotations?
      
      The information regarding quantities of ingredients listed in order of highest quantity first is so important it should be at the beginning of the article and not at the end.
      
      Watch out for making statements that might not be true. For instance, saturated fats may not be as bad as they've been portrayed recently. Also, some scientists question the value of using calories as a measure of a food's potential regarding weight gain/loss.
      
      What's that 'footnote' halfway through?
      
      The bit about sugars... the sugars don't need to be capitalized.
      
      There's no conclusion, the article ends abruptly.
      
      Also remember that most of your readers will be from the USA -- they don't use grams on labels as far as I know. You need to be specific about where your information applies -- it varies.
      
      I think you need to put this aside for a day or two, then come back and read it again. Try to simplify the information by using bullet points and tables. Reduce the 'in-your-face' %s and figures. It's all too confusing.
      
      Good luck.

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   Sherry Hposted 6 years ago

   Hi theraggededge, thank you so much for such a well detailed feedback. I got to learn some new things.
   
   It should be 1 gram of both carbohydrates and proteins gives 4 grams calories and 1 gram fat gives 9. I think I typed wrong. And because it's ratio of 4:4:9 we can't put it into 1 gram terms. This is what I know. Thank you for noticing it and everything else. Will make change for once and delete if it still doesn't get featured.

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      AliciaCposted 6 years agoin reply to this

      Hi, Sherry. Based on what you've just said, I think you're still a little confused. Grams and calories are two different things. One gram of carbohydrate contains four calories of energy (not grams calories). One gram of protein also contains four calories of energy. One gram of fat contains nine calories.

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   Sherry Hposted 6 years ago

   My bad. Yes you are right, I got it framed wrong. Thanks.

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