I'd like feedback on my article: What is Real Islam?

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   itsTalhaposted 4 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article? What can I do to improve?
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   Here is my article: What is Real Islam? (must be signed in to view)

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      theraggededgeposted 4 years agoin reply to this

      Hi there,
      
      You can't keep posting threads on the same article.
      
      We have given you feedback and that still stands. Your article is too short. You need another 700-1000 words of your own writing.

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         itsTalhaposted 4 years agoin reply to this

         I had but still It is not passed

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            DrMark1961posted 4 years agoin reply to this

            If you are not able to fix it, it may never be approved.
            Why dont you try writing something else and come back to that article later after you have honed your skills?

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            theraggededgeposted 4 years agoin reply to this

            You have not. I have pasted your text into a document and it comes to 319 words including the subtitles.
            
            You can't include the quotes because they are not original text. So it's way too short.
            
            I've explained this to you about four times now.
            
            Maybe you are counting characters instead of words?

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      AliciaCposted 4 years agoin reply to this

      Hi. One thing that I’ve noticed in all of the versions of your article is the grammar errors in the first text capsule.
      
      The errors in the second paragraph could be corrected in multiple ways, but I’ve given one suggestion below. It’s grammatically correct, though the second use of the word “Islamophobia” so close to the first one is repetitious. I didn’t want to change your words too much. Perhaps you could change the second use to “fear of Muslims”.
      
      The deadly attack in the New Zealand mosque was caused by Islamophobia. Many other brutal events have been caused by Islamophobia.
      
      You've left out some words in the fourth paragraph of the first text capsule. The sections should say "Muslims are trying to explain to everyone"  and "only a few people".
      
      You also need to make sure that you leave a space after the period at the end of a sentence.

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   Kenna McHughposted 4 years ago

   Writing is not an effortless task unless you don't want to get published. I suspect you are not studying the guidelines or working on your writing in general. There are tons of ESL writing classes online that are free. Try one of those and see if it helps your writing ability.

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   Nicoartzposted 4 years ago

   The grammar isn't great. There is a great free program by Google called "Grammarly" I would download it. It will help you out a bit with grammar and spelling. The basic version is free. However, the paid may be beneficial to you. Either way couldn't hurt. I hope that helps, good luck with all of your future writing projects.

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      itsTalhaposted 4 years agoin reply to this

      Thank you. This is the best app

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