I'd like feedback on my article: 3 Simple Ways to Become Fearless

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   Dipaligandhiposted 3 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article? What can I do to improve? Thanks!
   Here is my article: 3 Simple Ways to Become Fearless (must be signed in to view)

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      manatita44posted 3 years agoin reply to this

      Seems pretty straightforward to me. Sometimes, even tiny changes work. You can change the title to 'How to Overcome Fear.' Also, twigging the article a little helps. Change the '3' in the title to 'Three.'
      Source your photographs or change any suspicious ones. Some minor grammatical problems, but they should not affect it. Capitalize 'god.
      
      Hub Pages sometimes tell you what the problem is. Read their notes to you carefully. Om Shanti!

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         Dipaligandhiposted 3 years agoin reply to this

         Hi Manatita44,
         
         Thanks for the feedback. Can u just point the grammatical errors? It would help me fix n improve my writing.

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            manatita44posted 3 years agoin reply to this

            Ok. I will take it and change it for you. Give me 20 mins. - Lantern

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               Dipaligandhiposted 3 years agoin reply to this

               If you do it, then I will not be able to know my mistakes. I request if you can please highlight the errors.

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                  theraggededgeposted 3 years agoin reply to this

                  If Lantern does it, you will never learn how to write in English. The errors will be fixed but you won't know why or how.
                  
                  Teach yourself.
                  
                  Edit: Sorry I misread. You are only asking for the errors to be highlighted, not fixed. That's a good way to learn.

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                     manatita44posted 3 years agoin reply to this

                     Her writing is fine. We who are native speakers, can and do make mistakes. Sometimes, it can be more a question of habit than anything else. - Lantern

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                        theraggededgeposted 3 years agoin reply to this

                        I misread her original post, I thought she was asking you to fix her mistakes.

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                           manatita44posted 3 years agoin reply to this

                           Chuckle. 'Love you' theraggededge. Tell me about 'ragged' sometime.

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                              theraggededgeposted 3 years agoin reply to this

                              It's because I used to do a lot of craft, sewing, and arty articles. I always liked a raggy raw edge

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                                 manatita44posted 3 years agoin reply to this

                                 Charming!

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                                    theraggededgeposted 3 years agoin reply to this

                                    What do you mean by that?

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                                       manatita44posted 3 years agoin reply to this

                                       Your love of what you do or did. I think it's cute!

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                                          theraggededgeposted 3 years agoin reply to this

                                          Oh, okay. When people say it with an exclamation in the UK, it generally means the opposite

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                                       manatita44posted 3 years agoin reply to this

                                       I know, my Dear. We esoteric and meta-physical aspirants, live in a different dimension. Ha ha. I offer you my Heart. Good night.

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                     Dipaligandhiposted 3 years agoin reply to this

                     No sorry! It is okay. I am grateful that you took that chance to alert me.

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               Dipaligandhiposted 3 years agoin reply to this

               Hi Manatita44,
               
               If okay, can you list down the grammatical errors here? This is because still the article got unpublished.

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            manatita44posted 3 years agoin reply to this

            Thanks.
            
            Well, I read the whole thing. The changes are highlighted in red. I have also omitted a few words. Generally, one should not change the writer's voice, so your own consciousness is still there. if you want it, then send me an email. I have written to you via Hubpages. You should also change at least one photo.

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      ahostagesituationposted 3 years agoin reply to this

      Your article is easy to follow and it is clear.  I think you could benefit from including some of the clear benefits of becoming fearless.  Results are always what's for sale, and as a writer, even though you're not technically selling...you are.  You want someone to read what you're writing, and you want them to read more from you.  Especially if you write "how to's" That's my two cents

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         Dipaligandhiposted 3 years agoin reply to this

         Sure, will think on this too and implement. Thanks!

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   AliciaCposted 3 years ago

   As Manatita says, the article does contain a few grammatical errors. I think it would be a good idea to fix them. I think you should also replace the images with ones that have a suitable license. The website mentioned on them says that their material is copyrighted. In addition, since each photo displays a web address and the address is the same on each image, a moderator may have thought that you were trying to promote the site.

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      Dipaligandhiposted 3 years agoin reply to this

      Thank u. Will implement the same.

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   Kenna McHughposted 3 years ago

   You need to have a bio that proves you are a reliable source for this topic.

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      Dipaligandhiposted 3 years agoin reply to this

      Oh ok. Thanks for ur feedback.

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   Dipaligandhiposted 3 years ago

   Hello all,
   Is there any way to contact Hubpage n ask where the article is lacking?

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   Dipaligandhiposted 3 years ago

   This is because despite your valuable feedback points, the article is still not featured.

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