I Felt It Die

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   DomShadowsposted 14 years ago

   My finger tips are numb from defeat
   
   There’s blood on everything,
   
   Watch me slowly as I fade
   
   Into something evil
   
   Maybe tomorrow, not on this day..
   
   Watch as the womb I will eat
   
   As something evil creeps Into the darkness  =-=
   
   It..Needed to be stopped..
   
   A disease that flows strong
   
   Not even a real man can top..
   
   Stand on our battleground
   
   Kneel and pray AS I smash You down..
   
   Sunlight in your hair,
   
   Cutting myself of all things that bind myself of you
   
   I heard you cry. And that’s why we felt it Die..
   
   I heard you scream So delicate, so desirable
   
   It wasn’t a dream
   
   I felt you cry on the inside that night,
   
   A certain kind of passion
   
   No other man will feel..
   
   Not even in the face of deceit..
   
   Will he ever see the real you
   
   I felt it die,This love inside
   
   Fades away..To a new place I could wish to find
   
   This haunting will linger This mourning, it will stay..
   
   I felt it die Again
   
   In the darkest of places

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   TINA Vposted 14 years ago

   I suggest you can make this as your first hub under Poetry category.
   
   Welcome to hubpages!

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      christalluna1124posted 14 years agoin reply to this

      Beautiful and deep. I look forward to your next posting. I love poetry and yours was really touching.
      Christal

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      AEvansposted 14 years agoin reply to this

      I agree with all other hubbers beautiful, deep and make it your first hub. Welcome to HP:)

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   KCC Big Countryposted 14 years ago

   I agree with Tina.  You're "wasting" it the forums.  Post your poetry in a hub.  More people will be able to find it because of the categories, etc.
   
   I welcome you to HubPages too!

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   Hmrjmr1posted 14 years ago

   I too concur with KCC and Tina make some hubs you have a lot to let out and you're good at it.

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   pioneer_writer5posted 14 years ago

   your poem was captivating.

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   Beth100posted 14 years ago

   This really should be your first hub -- very powerful, drawing the reader in.  Welcome to the hubbing community!

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   DomShadowsposted 14 years ago

   Everyone thank you so very much. I appreciate your words and the info./help.
   
   
   Thanks,
   Dom

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   donotfearposted 14 years ago

   I feel such depth and despair from this reading. You are a worthy human being deserving of love and health. May God bless you always, be with you and guide you in your journey!

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      DomShadowsposted 14 years agoin reply to this

      Wow, thank you.

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   XTASISposted 14 years ago

   I like the words, and the way they're put.
   But I don't understand what you're talking about.
   I'd like to know.

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      DomShadowsposted 14 years agoin reply to this

      Well, when I was growing up I had not alot of things I felt no love. I grew, came to Arizona and I met a women with a lil' son that took me for granted and took it all away. You ever felt so great about something than it was ripped from you?

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         tantrumposted 14 years agoin reply to this

         thanks for explaining.
         the poem is beautiful!
         I'm Xtasis  as well .

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            DomShadowsposted 14 years agoin reply to this

            It's really nice to know you have multiple Personality Disorder. NOW, that is cool..

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               tantrumposted 14 years agoin reply to this

               

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    eyeofhposted 14 years ago

    Great Poem!

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    BEAUTYBABEposted 14 years ago

    Hi Dom, Welcome to Hubpages.
    I read your poem and could feel and see in your words how you    would have felt being let down so badly that it took everything away from you. I felt your pain and despair. You are a gifted poet. I have written some poetry myself, nothing terrific, as I am not a writer but a singer. I too have had despair in my life and I know how it feels to be let down so badly that you feel your life if over, but you soon realise that it is not the end of the world, pick yourself back up and get on with life again. I think this is a good start for you on Hubpages. I would be pleased for your opinion on my attempt at lyrical poetry. I look forward to seeing more of your poems. God Bless BB

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       DomShadowsposted 14 years agoin reply to this

       Thank you so much for those kind words and I'm going now to see.. If I never responded to this before I apologies.  Wow, those words made me feel better. I mean I moved on, but how far can you move on from love?

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    prettydarkhorseposted 14 years ago

    beautiful poetry,,,

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       DomShadowsposted 14 years agoin reply to this

       Thank you very much.

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    mistrunnerposted 14 years ago

    different dude but it touches truth continue on...

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       DomShadowsposted 14 years agoin reply to this

       What do you mean by different? THANKS thou but what do you mean?

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