Why hub doesn't letting me published this poem?

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   chanrothposted 12 years ago

   Sucking red popsicles
   Grinding teeth
   Juicy cherry replace his lip stick
   
   Poison fang fly like birds
   Intruding ladies in dark wood
   Caused it be the dirtiest horror
   
   Kissing pale boys
   He stroke her thigh
   Biting her neck she shook in fear
   
   Teen watched this film
   Fear arise
   Biting on popcorn to cool for a while
   
   Drinking coke with lots of ice
   But horror arose by movie desire
   And hearing girls scream in the back seat
   
   And guys cracking up in the front seat
   But scream afterward
   When the scariest man appear in 3D scene

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   paradigmsearchposted 12 years ago

   My best guess:
   
   "Sucking" put you at the tripwire
   
   And
   
   "He stroke her thigh" tripped you over it.

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   bonnebartronposted 12 years ago

   um, you may want to recheck your grammar and usage? I dunno...

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      AdeleCosgroveBrayposted 12 years agoin reply to this

      
      
      
      
      
      Perhaps English isn't her first language, hence the mangled title of this thread?  It's just a thought...

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   chanrothposted 12 years ago

   English is not my first language. Hoping that soon I can expand my English writing on hub!

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   Cagsilposted 12 years ago

   Since you have posted your poem to this forum thread, it will not be allowed to be published as a hub.
   
   Hubpages doesn't allow duplicate content. Everything must be original.

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   chanrothposted 12 years ago

   I published it as a hub before I post it on forum, it wouldn't allow me to published it because of wording. I think "Sucking" and "stroking thigh" is the problem. I'm not sure. That's why I asked. Maybe I have grammar or my English suck. lol

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   awareposted 12 years ago

   punctuation  maybe.  cant be the wording  from what i see. now subject matter on the other hand. i hate twilight  movies. lol
   ray

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   chanrothposted 12 years ago

   lol....

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   Tallgardenerposted 12 years ago

   I don't thing it was the risque language or the subject matter. I have used swear words and alluded to masturbation in my poems.

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