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   DavidSimmons1776posted 8 years ago

   http://hubpages.com/holidays/scarystories-okay it's up now

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      FatFreddysCatposted 8 years agoin reply to this

      Ummmmm....no it's not.

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   DavidSimmons1776posted 8 years ago

   here's something I wrote is it original enough?-okay when i was 12 years old a dog almost killed me-what happened was this I was walking home from school and a huge german shepherd come out of nowhere and started chasing me so ran across the street figuring he wouldn't follow (given the fact that up to that point I had never seen any dog do that) but he did then I ran down the street he ran I ran faster he ran eventually I ran out of breath and had to stop running and then he started to bit my ankle and blood started dripping everywhere so picked up a stick and started hitting him in the face after a few more minutes he stopped and I was able to hobble home.

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      theraggededgeposted 8 years agoin reply to this

      David, what is it that you want to achieve at HubPages?
      
      Do you want to be a writer?
      Be part of a community?
      Share parts of your life?
      Make money?
      
      You have to read before you can write. The Learning Center will help you: https://hubpageshelp.com
      
      A hub has to be around 700 words minimum. It has to inform or entertain. If you can't manage 700 words of original writing, you won't get anything published.
      
      Your story is an anecdote. It's not an article. Here is a random hub (article) about dog bites http://hubpages.com/animals/Signs-a-Dog … ut-to-Bite Can you see what you need to do?

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      NateB11posted 8 years agoin reply to this

      i like it

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   DavidSimmons1776posted 8 years ago

   well I want to do all 4 be a writer, be part of a community share things, make money-I just wanted to know if this time im on the right track with the story before I wrote more -and by the way that story really happeneed

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      theraggededgeposted 8 years agoin reply to this

      No, David. That's no good for a HubPages article. I'm sorry but it's not possible to turn it into a full hub as it is. It's not terribly interesting - most people can relate a frightening experience like that, whether dog, cat, bully or whatever. The trick is to write it up as a fully rounded topic, like the link I included in my last reply.
      
      Writers will scour their memories and experiences for stories like that one, then they think about how they could expand that topic or draw on it for inspiration.
      
      For instance, someone might remember a cake that their granny made years ago. They then turn it into a useful article based around the recipe, complete with photos and background information about the origin of the recipe, the best ingredients to use, where to purchase them, how to serve the cake and alternative ideas for the recipe.
      
      Or, taking the dog biting episode, they might write about how to deal with irrational fear based on that one incident. How they are afraid of all dogs and how they cope with that fear. Or how they managed to overcome their fear and became a top dog trainer. Or how to deal with a child who is scared of dogs. Or... anything that could be connected with a childhood dog bite.
      
      If you can't do that sort of thing, you won't be able to write here.
      
      Have you been reading the articles in the Learning Center?

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   DavidSimmons1776posted 8 years ago

   of course I read the articles -the point of the story is that to this day i'm scared of all dogs I thought that was understood

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      theraggededgeposted 8 years agoin reply to this

      David, I'm not arguing about your story. The point you are missing is that it is not one that will attract readers. It has to be more. It has to help, inform or entertain. How does your story fit in with those criteria?
      
      How can you turn it into a 700-800 word article? What's your plan for it?

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   DavidSimmons1776posted 8 years ago

   I thought it atleast entertained people -and as far as the 700 words I could write other dogs interactions I've had

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      theraggededgeposted 8 years agoin reply to this

      To entertain it has to be funny, scary or useful. It has to grab the reader's attention so that they want more.  You are recounting an incident that is none of those things. We've all had those experiences - what's different about your encounter?
      
      Filling a hub with those kinds of incidents is not going to work. There must be a reason, an outcome or advice included.
      
      Perhaps you would be better starting your own blog. On Blogger you can include Amazon advertisements to help you earn money. You would be free to make your own decisions on what to publish. You could use your own photos and stories all you like. When you become a more proficient writer, with lots of experience about how to put together a well-written article, you can return to HubPages and try again.

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   DavidSimmons1776posted 8 years ago

   I already tried blogger-anyway how am I going relate a story to other people when they weren't there?

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   DavidSimmons1776posted 8 years ago

   and another thing this hub here is a copy so didn't this person get in trouble ?-http://hubpages.com/holidays/Scary-Stories-for-Halloween-The-Red-Ribbon

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      greenmindposted 8 years agoin reply to this

      My hubber brothers and sisters! You are being trolled!

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         Michael Kismetposted 8 years agoin reply to this

         There is a minute possibility that he isn't a troll..which would make this situation quite sad, indeed.

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            Marisa Wrightposted 8 years agoin reply to this

            I think you are right

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         Will Apseposted 8 years agoin reply to this

         You can find his blog and Google Plus profile, if you look. It would be a lot of trouble for a troll to take. Which is why I am not getting involved. Guy seems genuine.

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            theraggededgeposted 8 years agoin reply to this

            I think so too. He's no troll. Possibly health issues.
            
            Sorry, David, don't mean to talk about you like this but you've got people confused.

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      theraggededgeposted 8 years agoin reply to this

      Because the hub is probably quite old and hasn't been through the filters like all new hubs (and newly edited hubs) are. It's been flagged for review.
      
      It doesn't matter what other people are passing off as writing, what's important is what you are writing. Copying is not allowed, so don't do it.

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   DavidSimmons1776posted 8 years ago

   you didn't answer my question about the hub being a copy

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   DavidSimmons1776posted 8 years ago

   why are people confused?

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    DavidSimmons1776posted 8 years ago

    the hub is about 3 1/2 years old  -however the ribbon story is a very well known story -so how is this fair?
    and besides here's another one http://hubpages.com/relationships/5-Thi … -a-divorce
    most people know someone who's divorced (if not been through it themselves) so it shouldn't entertain anyone

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       theraggededgeposted 8 years agoin reply to this

       Because, as I explained, if a hub hasn't been edited recently, it will have not passed through the quality assessment process, therefore remains published. New hubs and edited hubs are checked. That's why you can't post duplicate or copied content.
       
       It's not allowed, so accept it and let it go. There's no point scouring HubPages for 'illegal' hubs - we already know there are plenty of them. That's why HP is trying to clean up. Can't be done in one go. Stop posting links here - it's not ethical to call out other people's hubs - even if they are bad ones.
       
       Edit: Not sure why you have linked to that divorce hub anyway. What's wrong with it?  It's helpful and informative. It doesn't appear to be copied and was recently edited.

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    DavidSimmons1776posted 8 years ago

    is it ethical for other people to call out my hubs?

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       theraggededgeposted 8 years agoin reply to this

       Not if they are holding it up as a bad example. You are allowed to post the link if you need help with it, but not otherwise as it will be seen as self-promoting.
       
       It's okay to link to another person's hub in a positive way. For example, I could post a link to one of Marissa's hubs if I thought it would help you. She's not allowed to post (promote) her own hub.
       
       If you read through the forum threads you'll get an idea how it works.

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    DavidSimmons1776posted 8 years ago

    tell me why are people confused-I should be able to clear this up

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       SmartAndFunposted 8 years agoin reply to this

       People are confused as to whether you are a troll or are genuine.

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    DavidSimmons1776posted 8 years ago

    I'm not a troll, but why does it seem like that?

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       SmartAndFunposted 8 years agoin reply to this

       Because we are giving you lots of advice, but you are not accepting any of it. In fact, it is as if you are intentionally ignoring our advice (perhaps trolling). You just keep posting more of the same poorly written paragraphs and asking if they are good enough. No, they are not. We have told you that.
       
       I posted the link below for you earlier. If you are not a troll and really want to publish here, read the linked article and follow its advice. Write a "Stellar Hub" as described in this article and it will pass the assessment process.
       https://hubpageshelp.com/content/Learni … tellar-Hub

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    DavidSimmons1776posted 8 years ago

    see the thing is you guys decide to dislike whatever topic I pick

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       SmartAndFunposted 8 years agoin reply to this

       Jokes, stories, riddles, whatever. Pick a topic and write an article following the stellar hub guidelines. If you actually follow those guidelines, your article will pass quality assessment, unless it is plagiarized or the topic is something which is not allowed here, such as gambling, prostitution, pr0n or how to murder people.
       
       Good luck and have fun.
       
       P.S. Have you actually read ALL information we have linked to in this very long, ridiculous and unproductive thread? If not, do so before asking any more questions.

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    DavidSimmons1776posted 8 years ago

    most of the ideas I have are not my own-what if I wrote how to handle slenderman?

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       SmartAndFunposted 8 years agoin reply to this

       That sounds like a cute idea. Go for it, but make it fun (or scary) and entertaining, and put in all your own ideas on how to handle Slenderman. Think of several different scenarios and write different tactics for each scenario, regarding how to handle Slenderman in these different situations. Have fun with it and get creative. Make up ALL your own scenarios and tactics for handling Slenderman and it won't matter if the basic idea of "how to handle Slenderman" was your original topic idea or not.
       
       Break it up into short paragraphs and different text capsules, and use subheads for the different situations and tactics. It must be in-depth (MUCH more than one paragraph). Your dog story was waaayyyyy too short. When you are creating your hub, look in the top right corner and as you create it, boxes will be checked off as you reach certain milestones within the hub (number of words, number of photos, video, poll, etc). The more boxes that get checked, the more likely it is that your hub will pass the QAP. Also, remember to read the articles linked here before you start writing.
       
       And you must use correct spelling, grammar and punctuation: no more hyphens instead of periods, no more starting a sentence with a lowercase letter.
       
       Now have at it, and please prove to me that I am not a fool and have not wasted my time on this thread. I am a hopeless fool in real life so, it's nice to live with the illusion that I'm not a fool on the internet.

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    DavidSimmons1776posted 8 years ago

    help the computer isn't letting me start a hub

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    SmartAndFunposted 8 years ago

    Awwwww I knew it!

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       greenmindposted 8 years agoin reply to this

       That's okay Smartand Fun you're still the nicest one here!

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          SmartAndFunposted 8 years agoin reply to this

          Not usually, LOL. But thanks.
          
          Don't know why this guy made my stone cold heart get all wishy-washy. I really wanted to help him. LOL. Back to being a big fool.

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       calculus-geometryposted 8 years agoin reply to this

       Maybe he is a time traveler from 1776...
       
       or a potato.

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    NateB11posted 8 years ago

    

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    SmartAndFunposted 8 years ago

    

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    DavidSimmons1776posted 8 years ago

    no the computer is really off

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    SmartAndFunposted 8 years ago

    How about pressing the "on" button?
    
    

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    DavidSimmons1776posted 8 years ago

    first of all what is that animal -and second it works it's just the starting a hub part

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       greenmindposted 8 years agoin reply to this

       Sometimes the main guys at HubPages actually do turn off your computer by remote control. It can be a real pain.

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    Jesse Drzalposted 8 years ago

    I love how his Hub score jumped one point from yesterday. 10 to 11. One. Single. Point.   .

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    FatFreddysCatposted 8 years ago

    

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    SmartAndFunposted 8 years ago

    It's a pony.
    
    

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    SmartAndFunposted 8 years ago

    I love helping people on the internet.
    
    

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    DavidSimmons1776posted 8 years ago

    okay I got it working

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    Will Apseposted 8 years ago

    If he is a troll he has been plotting this for nearly three years:
    
    https://plus.google.com/117314083728197895526
    starts Aug 8, 2013
    
    I reckon he just likes riddles and jokes.

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    DavidSimmons1776posted 8 years ago

    I wrote this story why didn't It get published-I awoke to a slight pressure on my right leg. It was strange how calmly I reacted, considering I had no idea what was going on, and had snapped awake as if I had not even been sleeping in the first place. There was a moving weight on my right leg, something crawling onto me, with blind hands groping my body as it made it’s way up towards my face. I heard the voice of my 4 year old son, Will, as my senses focused on what was going on. “Daddy, daddy, daddy, wake up daddy.” “What is it buddy?” “I scared daddy dere’s a ghost daddy.” Over the last week, every night that I laid Will down for bed, he would repeat the same three things as I was leaving the room. A plea for me to leave the light on, followed by a plea to leave the door open. As well as a following explanation that differed between being scared of “booby traps”, “ghosts” or...oddly enough, an “artic fox”. I assured him each night that there was nothing to be afraid of, instructing him to say “Go away ghost/fox/booby trap, or I’ll BEAT YOU UP!” I figured the best way to tackle the idea of irrational fears in a 4 year old was to instill the belief in him that whatever boogeyman he might be facing, it is beatable. My hope was that if he had the mentality that his fears were capable of being beaten up, they would cease to be fears. It had been a full 5 days of this now, though, and I was getting frustrated. “There’s no ghost, buddy, I already beat all the ghosts up.” “Dis ghost say ‘You daddy wrong’ and den ghost flies up over dere” Will pointed up at the corner of my room. “I scared daddy, can I sleep wif you?” “Yeah buddy, just be still and don’t squirm too much, alright?” I turned my phone over and opened the lock screen to check the time, the brief glare of the screen slightly blinded me as “2:04am” stared back at me. Will slid under the blankets next to me and cuddled close. He squirmed for a solid 30 minutes before finally falling asleep. I eventually fell back asleep shortly after that, leaving thoughts of ghosts for tomorrow morning. I didn’t consider Will’s irrational bedtime fears as being anything of note, considering how common it supposedly is with kids his age. The past week really wasn’t even bad, with last night being the first time he had woken up scared in a long time. Come to think of it, this might be the first time ever. Sure, like every child everywhere, he had woken up when he was really sick, or really hungry, or for whatever reason infants wake up every couple of hours a night until their sleep conditioning kicks in. I don’t remember him ever waking up scared before. I got on with my day as normally as possible, but I couldn’t stop thinking about it. I kept asking myself questions I didn’t have any answers to. That night, I laid Will down to sleep and read him a book called “Where the Snowbunnies Play” which featured an an arctic fox as the main antagonist, chasing the innocent Snowshoe Hares away from their home. The Hares get back at the fox by making a “booby trap” that catches the fox and saves the bunnies’ hides. The book put me to ease now that I knew what was upsetting Will. After the book, I kissed him on the forehead and told him goodnight, but as I was leaving, the same whining demands came forth from my little boy. “Daddy, don’t turn out the light! Dere’s a ghost right ovah dere, it come from da closet and fly ovah dere! Don’t close the door, daddy.” “Will,” I walked back over to his bed and sat down at the end of it, placing a hand on his little arm as I said “there are no ghosts here to bother you, there are no arctic foxes, and definitely no booby traps. If you get scared in the night, you can always come get me, ok buddy?” Will still looked scared, but he nodded silently. I kissed him once more on the forehead and left his room, carefully closing the door but leaving it open just a crack to let a little light from the hallway in. My eyes seemed to have closed just an instant before they snapped open again. I felt no slight pressure on my leg this time, but an overwhelming sense of wrong, the tight balled up feeling in the chest that seems to strike when something inexplicable causes a fearful anxiety that paralyzes all rational thought. I felt so unsettled, I didn’t move for what seemed like an eternity. The bedroom was silent. More than silent...I couldn’t hear ANYTHING. Not the A/C or the slight hum of the ceiling fan, not the normal muffled sound of occasional traffic outside, nothing. I realized that I could not even hear my own shallow breaths into my pillow, and that finally convinced me to move.

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    SmartAndFunposted 8 years ago

    I like it.
    

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       Jesse Drzalposted 8 years agoin reply to this

       This picture is really starting to mess with my mind..in a good way.

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    Jesse Drzalposted 8 years ago

    I like it as well. It has potential to be a good story.

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    DavidSimmons1776posted 8 years ago

    why didn't it get published?

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       calculus-geometryposted 8 years agoin reply to this

       Technically you did publish it by posting it on the forum, so you're a published author now. Congrats I guess.

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       theraggededgeposted 8 years agoin reply to this

       It's not your writing, is it, David? I can tell by the vocabulary and the punctuation. It's nothing like the style of the dog story or your forum posts.

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    theraggededgeposted 8 years ago

    I think some of you should stop bullying David. He's not a troll. If you can't be pleasant and helpful then leave him alone.

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       Will Apseposted 8 years agoin reply to this

       Once a pack forms...

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       makingamarkposted 8 years agoin reply to this

       I think you're right - although to be honest it was very difficult to tell for a long time because his behaviour is what a troll emulates and displays.
       
       David - if you want ONE TIP for getting published it's this.
       
       Start using paragraphs and then use them all the time.
       
       You cannot write online and expect people to read dense long tracts of text - because people don't.

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    DavidSimmons1776posted 8 years ago

    of course it's my writing -and i'm not a troll-so why didn't it get published?

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       theraggededgeposted 8 years agoin reply to this

       What did it say when it wouldn't publish?
       
       Have you seen this? https://hubpageshelp.com/content/Learni … ng-hubtool

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    DavidSimmons1776posted 8 years ago

    here's what it said-This Hub is unpublished because it did not receive high enough ratings to meet HubPages' quality standards or because it contains spammy elements. It will remain unpublished until it is edited, published again, and rated high enough to be Featured. To see our rating criteria, please visit our official rating scale (we recommend shooting for criteria matching Hubs rated eight or above).

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       makingamarkposted 8 years agoin reply to this

       and was it as presented? Or did you use lots of paragraphs?

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    DavidSimmons1776posted 8 years ago

    as presented

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       theraggededgeposted 8 years agoin reply to this

       So go and learn how to create a hub. We can't fix it for you.
       
       You need:
       
       A good title that will attract traffic
       Paragraphs
       More than one text capsule with sub-headings
       Relevant, legal images.
       
       https://hubpageshelp.com/content/Learni … ng-hubtool

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    DavidSimmons1776posted 8 years ago

    did you like story?

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       theraggededgeposted 8 years agoin reply to this

       Yes, but are you going to learn how to create a hub?

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    DavidSimmons1776posted 8 years ago

    that's not a hub?

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       theraggededgeposted 8 years agoin reply to this

       No, a block of text is not a hub. Go to the link I posted. Watch the video. If you can't do that, you are wasting your time and ours.

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    DavidSimmons1776posted 8 years ago

    what did you think of the ending?

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       firstcookbookladyposted 8 years agoin reply to this

       What happen if he actually did see some strange creature.... then what? How are you going to protect him? He's only four, you know. He's vulnerable to emotional shocks--- I did write a page on young kids and old people, how I believe that they see stuff that others cannot see...   Unless you're making the whole story up...

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          firstcookbookladyposted 8 years agoin reply to this

          The stories of Harry Potter went a long time... The Hobbit, Alice in Wonderland....

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             firstcookbookladyposted 8 years agoin reply to this

             and EVEN if you are making it all  up, you are a writer. You can do that.

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                firstcookbookladyposted 8 years agoin reply to this

                Like someone said, break it up into smaller chunks. When you talk or think, paragraph. When your kid talks or thinks, paragraph. If the creature makes a move, another paragraph. And, warn your reader of the changes. That's where the keywords come in...

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                   firstcookbookladyposted 8 years agoin reply to this

                   And, you're not wasting our time. We just had to get to know your question style.

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                      firstcookbookladyposted 8 years agoin reply to this

                      Your ending was spooky. I can hardly believe you left him in there, alone.

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    firstcookbookladyposted 8 years ago

    [really... you told him...Come get me.. if he comes back...] as the kid tries to leave to come get you and the thing gets him by the foot.... dragging him back.... and all you have, is fingernail marks on that floor in his room. A slight mark in the dust. One piece of your son's hair....

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    firstcookbookladyposted 8 years ago

    Sad.

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    firstcookbookladyposted 8 years ago

    Thank heavens this is fictional.

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    firstcookbookladyposted 8 years ago

    Books, Literature, and Writing → Books & Novels → Fiction → Mystery & Suspense Books  This is where you should put your story.

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    firstcookbookladyposted 8 years ago

    Right? Everyone?

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    DavidSimmons1776posted 8 years ago

    here's another copy and firstcook fyi it's 100% fictain- awoke to a slight pressure on my right leg. It was strange how calmly I reacted, considering I had no idea what was going on, and had snapped awake as if I had not even been sleeping in the first place. There was a moving weight on my right leg, something crawling onto me, with blind hands groping my body as it made it’s way up towards my face.
    
    I heard the voice of my 4 year old son, Will, as my senses focused on what was going on. “Daddy, daddy, daddy, wake up daddy.”
    
    “What is it buddy?”
    
    “I scared daddy dere’s a ghost daddy.”
    
    Over the last week, every night that I laid Will down for bed, he would repeat the same three things as I was leaving the room. A plea for me to leave the light on, followed by a plea to leave the door open. As well as a following explanation that differed between being scared of “booby traps”, “ghosts” or...oddly enough, an “artic fox”. I assured him each night that there was nothing to be afraid of, instructing him to say “Go away ghost/fox/booby trap, or I’ll BEAT YOU UP!”
    
    I figured the best way to tackle the idea of irrational fears in a 4 year old was to instill the belief in him that whatever boogeyman he might be facing, it is beatable. My hope was that if he had the mentality that his fears were capable of being beaten up, they would cease to be fears. It had been a full 5 days of this now, though, and I was getting frustrated.
    
    “There’s no ghost, buddy, I already beat all the ghosts up.”
    
    “Dis ghost say ‘You daddy wrong’ and den ghost flies up over dere” Will pointed up at the corner of my room. “I scared daddy, can I sleep wif you?”
    
    “Yeah buddy, just be still and don’t squirm too much, alright?” I turned my phone over and opened the lock screen to check the time, the brief glare of the screen slightly blinded me as “2:04am” stared back at me. Will slid under the blankets next to me and cuddled close. He squirmed for a solid 30 minutes before finally falling asleep. I eventually fell back asleep shortly after that, leaving thoughts of ghosts for tomorrow morning.
    
    I didn’t consider Will’s irrational bedtime fears as being anything of note, considering how common it supposedly is with kids his age. The past week really wasn’t even bad, with last night being the first time he had woken up scared in a long time. Come to think of it, this might be the first time ever. Sure, like every child everywhere, he had woken up when he was really sick, or really hungry, or for whatever reason infants wake up every couple of hours a night until their sleep conditioning kicks in. I don’t remember him ever waking up scared before.
    
    I got on with my day as normally as possible, but I couldn’t stop thinking about it. I kept asking myself questions I didn’t have any answers to. That night, I laid Will down to sleep and read him a book called “Where the Snowbunnies Play” which featured an an arctic fox as the main antagonist, chasing the innocent Snowshoe Hares away from their home. The Hares get back at the fox by making a “booby trap” that catches the fox and saves the bunnies’ hides.
    
    The book put me to ease now that I knew what was upsetting Will. After the book, I kissed him on the forehead and told him goodnight, but as I was leaving, the same whining demands came forth from my little boy. “Daddy, don’t turn out the light! Dere’s a ghost right ovah dere, it come from da closet and fly ovah dere! Don’t close the door, daddy.”
    
    “Will,” I walked back over to his bed and sat down at the end of it, placing a hand on his little arm as I said “there are no ghosts here to bother you, there are no arctic foxes, and definitely no booby traps. If you get scared in the night, you can always come get me, ok buddy?”
    
    Will still looked scared, but he nodded silently. I kissed him once more on the forehead and left his room, carefully closing the door but leaving it open just a crack to let a little light from the hallway in.
    
    My eyes seemed to have closed just an instant before they snapped open again. I felt no slight pressure on my leg this time, but an overwhelming sense of wrong, the tight balled up feeling in the chest that seems to strike when something inexplicable causes a fearful anxiety that paralyzes all rational thought. I felt so unsettled, I didn’t move for what seemed like an eternity. The bedroom was silent. More than silent...I couldn’t hear ANYTHING. Not the A/C or the slight hum of the ceiling fan, not the normal muffled sound of occasional traffic outside, nothing. I realized that I could not even hear my own shallow breaths into my pillow, and that finally convinced me to move.

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    firstcookbookladyposted 8 years ago

    better... yep. You're gaining!

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    firstcookbookladyposted 8 years ago

    now I'm assuming that your four year old still talks with a little baby talk, so that's why you misspelled a few words, for effect... like dere for there...

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    firstcookbookladyposted 8 years ago

    although, in a four year old, they say w for r, not d. Like dehwr.

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    firstcookbookladyposted 8 years ago

    I scared daddy dere’s a ghost daddy.  I think you need a comma after ghost, otherwise, it's not a ghost, daddy, it's a ghost daddy,which, might be worse, since it could be an adult ghost.... [smile] kinda like grandma being eaten by a comma....

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    firstcookbookladyposted 8 years ago

    you're going to have to give up and let him sleep in your bed until the repercussions of reading that book about the, what was it, a rabbit?.. You're a grown man. You should know better. Now he's going to be in your bed, until he's eight years old, and isn't afraid anymore. Good going... [smile]

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