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I'd like feedback on my article: How to be super energetic and active using...

  1. Sudip Choudhury profile image54
    Sudip Choudhuryposted 2 weeks ago

    Hi Hubbers,

    I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article How to be super energetic and active using Acupressure?. What can I do to improve? Thanks!

    1. theraggededge profile image99
      theraggededgeposted 2 weeks agoin reply to this

      Hi there,

      Do you think the title is search-friendly? Could you rework to be something people are searching for? Like Does Accupressure Increase Energy Levels? Or How to Increase Your Energy With Accepressure.

      The first image is very unattractive and doesn't seem to relate to the title. You have two instances of the same image further down. Is the Andres Gomez Garcia image legal to use? You haven't provided a live link or, alternatively, licensing info.

      Reduce the number of Amazon links. One is sufficient.

      Shorten your first sentence, it's a bit rambling. The whole paragraph could do with reworking -- it's one of those generic openings that just say what we all know. You could make it much more lively and likely to keep your readers on the page.

      "Have you thought about using accupressure to increase your energy levels? It's true, in just a few minutes you can boost your well-being, speed up your metabolism and become the super energetic person you want to be. I'm going to show you how."

      Doesn't that make you want to read on?

      Avoid generalisations like 'the majority of us' and 'most of us'. You are writing for just one person - your reader. Imagine he is sitting with you. How would you explain your energy-boosting techniques?

      Do your best to infuse your writing with energy - give it the accupressure treatment. At the moment it is dull and lifeless.

      Hope that helps.

  2. Sudip Choudhury profile image54
    Sudip Choudhuryposted 2 weeks ago

    Thank you so much for your suggestions. 
    Your feedbacks are always helpful. I have changed the title, removed some images and links, and edited the first paragraph a bit.

  3. Sudip Choudhury profile image54
    Sudip Choudhuryposted 2 weeks ago

    My article has not passed the QAP yet. I edited it three times. It still shows that the article needs improvement. But, I am not understanding what kind of changes should I make? Do I need to add more information or improve my writing?
    Kindly, give some feedbacks on it.

  4. Kristen Howe profile image86
    Kristen Howeposted 2 weeks ago

    Go to the Learning Center and learn how to improve your hubs. It should be at least 1000 words for Google ratings. Make sure it's original and not duplicated.  Contact HP if you have questions. Read other hubs to see how it's done.

    1. Sudip Choudhury profile image54
      Sudip Choudhuryposted 2 weeks agoin reply to this

      Thanks. I edited some sections and included a video.
      It is published now.

 
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