I'd like feedback on my article: 17 Ideas for Wedding Favors - That your...

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  1. profile image59
    Ancsaposted 11 months ago

    Hi Hubbers,

    I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article 17 Ideas for Wedding Favors  - That your guests will love (must be signed in to view). What can I do to improve? Thanks!

  2. aesta1 profile image88
    aesta1posted 11 months ago

    Ancsa, the favours you included are interesting however, they will really stand out when you do a thorough edit of your article. Your titles must be in APA style and may need to be rephrased. Try out several rephrase and see what you'll come up with. Amazon module with no description of how it worked for you will not pass QAP. The links unless they enhance your article may also not pass.

    Sometimes, when I put titles on my pictures, they get a bit distracting. I looked at the top articles and some do but many don't.

    1. profile image59
      Ancsaposted 11 months agoin reply to this

      Hi Mary,
      Thank you for your valuable suggestion!
      I'll make the changes. :-)
      It seems a bit complicated. (for me) :-(

  3. aesta1 profile image88
    aesta1posted 11 months ago

    Read the paragraphs aloud. This might help you edit. The verb tenses are all over the place. You switch from past to present and then to past tense again. Just do it paragraph by paragraph.

  4. CYong74 profile image96
    CYong74posted 11 months ago

    May I suggest shorter titles. The header becomes weird, esp in APA style, when it is a full sentence.

  5. SmartAndFun profile image95
    SmartAndFunposted 11 months ago

    Is it just me, or does anyone else want to see the ideas numbered? The title is "17 ideas" but the ideas are not listed one at a time, or numbered. The reader should be able to skim the page and easily see what the 17 ideas are, rather than having to carefully read each paragraph to pick them out.

    Also, I would list the Jordan almonds last (or toward the end) rather than first. I realize they are a wedding tradition that goes way back, but has anyone given almonds out at a wedding in the last 25 years? When I saw almonds listed first, I immediately assumed this article had no new ideas. Not that there is anything wrong with giving out almonds, they are just not an original gift at all. Anyone can think of that idea on their own and no doubt has already come up with it before Googling for some new ideas. I think if the almonds are listed first, readers will assume the rest of the ideas are probably not  very interesting and they will immediately click away.

    I would remove the photos of the wedding invitations and instead use more photos of wedding favors. This article is not about invitations.

    One of the favor ideas is "executives." What is that?

    Have someone who is fluent in English check your entire article. Parts of this article sound almost like they have been spun.

    1. profile image59
      Ancsaposted 11 months agoin reply to this

      Thank you very much for your suggestion!
      Delete and begin again.

  6. CYong74 profile image96
    CYong74posted 11 months ago

    I feel numbering is compulsory when you use a listicle title.

    1. profile image59
      Ancsaposted 11 months agoin reply to this

      Thank you very much!
      Delete and begin again.

 
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