I'd like feedback on my article: Are We All Thieves?

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   ARUN KANTIposted 6 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article? What can I do to improve? Thanks!
   Here is my article: Are We All Thieves?

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      MizBejabbersposted 6 years agoin reply to this

      Arun, the others have made a very good assessments of your article, so I won't duplicate theirs. However, I would like to make a suggestion that may help you with your English grammar and punctuation. I keep a copy of a "Harbrace Handbook" handy when I'm writing. I use the college edition when I need to consult a grammar or punctuation question, and as an editor of 34 years, I still do quite frequently. There are a number of editions in an equal number of price ranges available, including used copies starting online for around $3 or $4. These books, or at least the college edition, consolidates the information so you don't have to wade through pages of explanation as in other manuals. Hopes this helps.

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   AliciaCposted 6 years ago

   Your article is interesting. It contains some English errors, but I think a major problem is the Amazon ad for a moisturizer. You don't describe the product and it has nothing to do with the article.
   
   It would also be a good idea to look for full-width images and to remove the big gaps above or below the photos. The photos should have a public domain license or a commercial Creative Commons one. (Perhaps the ones that you chose have one of these licenses, but I think the photos should be bigger if this is possible.)

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   Kenna McHughposted 6 years ago

   An interesting article,  but needs to be designed for reading on the Internet. Break the content down in capsules. As you do that, edit your work. There are blatant grammar errors.

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   ARUN KANTIposted 6 years ago

   Thank you for your wise advice.I shall definitely go by your suggestions.

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   ARUN KANTIposted 6 years ago

   Thank you very much for your wise advice.

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   Glenn Stokposted 6 years ago

   Arun, in addition to what the others have said, I’ll add three more suggestions.
   
   1. Google images are not safe to use. They may be protected by copyright. Google clearly states that under the images. If you definitively want to use an image you found in Google images, then you need to follow the link to the source that Google has listed, and check to be sure you have rights to use it commercially, 
   
   2. You tend to have very long paragraphs. Each paragraph should be limited to a single thought. Break up those thoughts into individual paragraphs. I also caught at least one run-on sentence. I suggest you proof read out loud. That works for me to find these kind of mistakes.
   
   3. I also noticed that you call your bio a profile. Saying “welcome to my Hubpages profile” doesn’t serve any purpose.  I would rework the text of your bio to show the reader why you offer expertise in the subject of that hub. This is the purpose of the individual bios.
   
   Your profile provides more detailed information about you as an author. There is only one profile.  But you can have multiple bios to assign to individual hubs.

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   paradigmsearchposted 6 years ago

   I only use images from federal websites. Taxpayer paid and public domain and all that. Whatever.

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   ARUN KANTIposted 6 years ago

   Thank you.

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