I'd like feedback on my article: A Tale of Two Cities

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   Ishan Guptaposted 5 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article? What can I do to improve? Thanks!
   Here is my article: A Tale of Two Cities (must be signed in to view)

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      AliciaCposted 5 years agoin reply to this

      Deleting the swear words would be a good way to begin the improvement.

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      OldRosesposted 5 years agoin reply to this

      A title that is the same as a title of a book about something completely different is not going to attract much traffic.  Your article is too short.  HubPages is looking for at least 1,000 words.  You need to attribute your photos.  They should either be your own or creative commons licensed and you need to say that.  You cannot just take photos off the internet.
      That is illegal.  You need to spend some time reviewing the material in the Learning Center (Help button, upper right).  That will tell you everything you need to know to write and format an article that will be published and featured on HubPages.

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   Margaret Panposted 5 years ago

   Hello Ishan,
   First of all, I agree with Alicia, swear words are a big NO, you must remove them from your article. I should also add that your article should be longer, around 1000 words and the text should be broken into multiple capsules with clear subtitles. Moreover, if the photos you have used are not yours, you should indicate that they have the correct license for use on Hubpages.
   
   Edit: While I was typing, OldRoses already wrote everything I had in mind. Now you have all the information you need! Good luck!

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   theraggededgeposted 5 years ago

   Hi there,
   
   Tip: write numbers less than 10 in full. Use proper English, so for example, "I have stayed in Mumbai for 3+ years, and it took me 2 weeks to fall in love with the city."
   
   Should be written as,
   
   "I have stayed in Mumbai for over three years, and it took me two weeks to fall in love with the city."
   
   Personally, I would change it to, "I have lived in Mumbai for over three years, but it only took me two weeks to fall in love with the city."
   
   24x7 should be 24/7.
   
   As others said, get rid of the profanities. Why would you use them? I assure you it does not make you look clever or edgy. Rather, the opposite. HubPages is a family-friendly site. And change that title.
   
   Break large blocks of text up into paragraphs. The content is confusing, as you jump from one city to the other within the same sentence. It would be better if you did a proper comparison - a paragraph on an aspect of Mumbai followed by a paragraph on the same aspect of Gurgaon.
   
   The money photo is useless. Get rid of it. Use your own photos.
   
   Hope that helps.

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   Ishan Guptaposted 5 years ago

   Thanks everyone for the feedback. I have used open images from unsplash which are legal to use. Also, I wanted the article to be informal and funny which the readers can relate to. But thanks for the feedback. I will do the necessary.

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   psycheskinnerposted 5 years ago

   The title still needs to describe what the article is about, or no one will ever find it.  In SEO plain beats clever.

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