I'd like feedback on my article: "LY bro. Stay Safe."

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   AG6789posted 4 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article? What can I do to improve? Thanks!
   Here is my article: "LY bro. Stay Safe." (must be signed in to view)

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      Miebakagh57posted 4 years agoin reply to this

      Given that each paragraph is 200 words, the article may be short of 700 words required by hubpages, as the story is not a poem.         Another minus side of the story is that it sound like a prose? Or I am not correct? Is a kid writing or an adult? This aspect is puzzling.                      The story ends lossly and has not a conclusion.

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         AG6789posted 4 years agoin reply to this

         It has 712 words, and it isn't a story. It's argumentative writing or an op-ed. It is written by a 13 yr old, me.

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            Miebakagh57posted 4 years agoin reply to this

            Well done then. You may fine tone it. Visit the learning center to do that. Welcome to hubpages.

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               AG6789posted 4 years agoin reply to this

               Thanks! Also, when I republished it, this time they said it was 'spammy'. Did you feel so too?

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                  Miebakagh57posted 4 years agoin reply to this

                  Yes, I do. But did you understand what "spammy" means within the online world? When you repeatedly use same phrase or sentence like: Ly. Bro. Stay Safe, Drastic Changes, Tense Atmospher, The News- all these structure repeats themselves more than three times, and as such are spammy elements. cut them off. Spammy is repeatition. Find similar words for them.

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      erorantesposted 4 years agoin reply to this

      Good evening mister AG6789. I found true facts about corona virus on your article. It is sad how the virus change our lives. We have to make the best out of the situation. We all have to make changes. Maybe we will create something new and make some money. I am sorry. You are going trough difficult times. One day things will be better for all of us. You need to Keep your faith in God. Now, I am going to tell you what you need in your article. You need three pictures that are related to the words in your paragraph. You need to edit and remove questions marks. You have too many comas and apostrophes. In other words check your punctuation. You need to read the hub pages learning center.

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   theraggededgeposted 4 years ago

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