I'd like feedback on my article: Raise Voice Against ,Violence on Women !!!

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   Fouzia Aliposted 3 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article? What can I do to improve? Thanks!
   Here is my article: Raise Voice Against ,Violence on Women !!! (must be signed in to view)

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      Abby Slutskyposted 3 years agoin reply to this

      I saw misspelled words (victimization), run-on sentences, periods without full sentences, and paragraphs that were way too long. Remember, the reader's eyes get tired on the screen. You need short paragraphs that they can easily follow. In paragraph 1, I would use "these" instead of "those" and "an" instead of "and". You have "quite" in one of your descriptions instead of "quiet". Also, it is very old school thinking that women are trained to accept whatever someone tells them. Not in today's society where I live. There are also some hyphens missing. I would use grammarly, but it does not even look like you used your computer's spell and grammar checker. I only mentioned a few specifics.  Oh, after all this, I see you copied it. (I didn't check that.)  If you write something else, you should make it your own and use a spell and grammar checker before you post.

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         Abby Slutskyposted 3 years agoin reply to this

         Just checked it. You certainly did.

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   AliciaCposted 3 years ago

   Your article is copied from Zeepedia, Gender Issues in Psychology (PSY - 512), Lesson 29.

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      FatFreddysCatposted 3 years agoin reply to this

      Ooooh, busted.

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      Miebakagh57posted 3 years agoin reply to this

      You can't denied the fact, can you?

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   JNalbach419posted 3 years ago

   I wish there was some sort of process for accepting new writers, it seems any Joe Schmoe can just write whatever they want. This feedback forum has   been really getting on my nerves with people asking for feedback that cant even write properly. DEEP BREATH haha.

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      DrMark1961posted 3 years agoin reply to this

      New writers go through a "bootcamp" where they are scrutinized more closely for the first 10 articles. They often fail, which is why they are on here asking for help. (Not sure why this one did not get flagged for copied content.) Yes, all of the posts here do seem excessive at times, but a percentage of them do go on to write useful things later.

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         NateB11posted 3 years agoin reply to this

         I flagged an article for being copied probably at least a month ago and that guy and his article are still on Hubpages. Must take moderators some time to get around to articles.

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            DrMark1961posted 3 years agoin reply to this

            Wow, that is way too much to remove a plagiarized article!

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   Fouzia Aliposted 3 years ago

   Thank you guys!!! For your feedback I will definitely learn from my mistakes..

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      Miebakagh57posted 3 years agoin reply to this

      Hi, this is a quetion of plagiarizing another's content.                Okay, go write an original article on you propused title, and in your own word.      Good success!

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