Please I would like to have feedback on my article

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   Misbah786posted 3 years ago

   Hello Beautiful Souls,
   
   I have submitted my article to “youmemindbody.com” they didn’t accept it and want me to improve it. I am not sure what kind of change they want.
   I would be thankful if someone could help me with this
   
   Here’s the link
   https://discover.hubpages.com/education … DEPRESSION
   
   
   
   Thanks a lot!

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      AliciaCposted 3 years agoin reply to this

      Hi, Misbah. Your article is interesting and informative. It contains some minor language errors, but I think the biggest problem is the references. Some of them don’t appear to be authoritative. You’ve written about a potentially serious medical condition, so suitable references are very important.

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         Misbah786posted 3 years agoin reply to this

         Thanks a lot, Linda. I am glad you found it interesting and informative. Thanks for your suggestions on the references. I will check it. Much appreciated
         Blessings

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   theraggededgeposted 3 years ago

   It looks pretty good, Misbah.
   
   A few things I noticed:
   
   Some big gaps between paragraphs.
   
   Minor grammatical errors, "Research shows, Undoubtedly, we all feel negative emotions."
   
   "sign of anxiety or acceptance." Should that be 'need for acceptance'?
   
   Many instances of passive voice. Use Hemingway to eliminate some of those.
   
   Don't put sub-headings in upper case.
   
   Make sure your references are linked via anchor text, not by the full url.
   
   I would make the bio sound more professional. The editors need to see that you are an expert in this field - see the third bullet point.
   
   It's a good topic and I hope it gets accepted.

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      Misbah786posted 3 years agoin reply to this

      Thanks a lot, Bev. I really appreciate your kindness.
      Thanks for taking the time to read my work and to guide me in detail. Much appreciated. I will follow your instructions.
      But can you please help me with the bio?
      Blessings

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         theraggededgeposted 3 years agoin reply to this

         Well I'm not a professional with a degree so maybe have a look at some similar articles and see what they say?

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            Misbah786posted 3 years agoin reply to this

            Oh, Okay! thanks for the kind suggestion, Bev
            Blessings

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   Urwa786posted 3 years ago

   Hi Misbah sis, Your article is much better, why they didn’t accept it. While as always, you have written well. I think the problem is the references.
   You don't worry

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      Misbah786posted 3 years agoin reply to this

      Thank you so much for your kind words, Urwa much appreciated, dear sister
      Blessings

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   Constant Jumaposted 3 years ago

   It is a nice article with comprehensive and in depth information. I think you need to edit and reduce elements of repetition of words or statements. This is also considered as spam. Learn more on hubpages learning center

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      Misbah786posted 3 years agoin reply to this

      Thanks for your kind suggestions, Constant Juma — much appreciated
      Blessings

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