I'd like feedback on my article: It Can Get Worse than $10/hr

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  1. BishamonSr profile image67
    BishamonSrposted 10 months ago

    Hi Hubbers,

    I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article? What can I do to improve? Thanks!

    No one can really figure out why this article isn't passing the quality assessment. It's a mystery. Lol.
    Here is my article: It Can Get Worse than $10/hr

    1. OldRoses profile image94
      OldRosesposted 10 months agoin reply to this

      There is no mystery here.  This is a really insulting aricle.  No one can live on $10/hour.  They cannot afford shelter, food or gas on those wages.  Telling them that they should be grateful because other people are worse off is despicable.

      This is not a suitable article for this platform.  HubPages is looking for magazine style articles that help people solve problems, not shame them.

      1. DrMark1961 profile image97
        DrMark1961posted 10 months agoin reply to this

        I am not going to argue with you on the article, but I do want to point out that your statement that "No one can live on $10/hour" makes it seem that the billions of humans that earn less than this do not matter. Not everyone lives where you live, buys the same food that you do, nor do they even posses a vehicle that runs on gas.

        1. OldRoses profile image94
          OldRosesposted 10 months agoin reply to this

          I agree, but if you read the article, you will see that it takes place in Delaware and no one can live on $10/hr in Delaware.

          1. DrMark1961 profile image97
            DrMark1961posted 10 months agoin reply to this

            Yes, I agree with that.

            1. Miebakagh57 profile image74
              Miebakagh57posted 10 months agoin reply to this

              Does it mean 1-hour is the maximum working hour at Daleware? Who push that into legislature?

              1. DrMark1961 profile image97
                DrMark1961posted 10 months agoin reply to this

                No. In the US It is usually an 8 hour day, só at $10 the person would make 80 a day minus taxes, social security tax, etc. Take home pay is about half what you earn, so as Oldroses points out it is not enough to support someone with expenses like a car.

  2. theraggededge profile image97
    theraggededgeposted 10 months ago

    Well, it's a bit muddled. Is the theme poverty, prostitution, or violence? Is it fiction or a real account? The title doesn't make it clear.

    There's an air of lecturing about it too. Your reader might not enjoy being told to be happy with their low paid job.

    You should credit the image correctly. On Unsplash you are given a link to paste into the image capsule.

    1. Miebakagh57 profile image74
      Miebakagh57posted 10 months agoin reply to this

      Bishamm, yes, your article should have a good single title 'prostitution' or...                              And, besides you had not given your write enough sub-headings.                                    That's the only issues I found.

  3. Ben716 profile image86
    Ben716posted 10 months ago

    For a personal, or even a commercial, blog, the title would be fit - its length and words. However, for commercial sites, such as Hubpages, the title is lengthy, and it doesn't provide an idea what the article is all about. In search engines, a part of your title won't be shown. An individual wouldn't bother to click the link to find out. The individual won't be able to know what the article is talking about thus they'll bypass it for other articles. Lastly,it won't rank well on search engines results. The two most important elements of an article that can improve viewership, or hurt your article, are the title and introduction.

    Images and videos serve the purpose of eliminating or reducing boredom when reading an article. Reading online is different that reading a physical book. One can get easily bored reading an article full of text blocks. Having 2-3 photos in a 800-word page will entice an individual to keep on reading your article. Always acknowledge the owner of the photo (if it's not yours), and provide a link to the photo. On the photo capsule (when editing your article), copy the link where you've gotten the photo (in this case, Unsplash), and input it on the link section. Above the link is the onwer's name. The third section of the photo capsule can be omitted but I do like to include a keyword there yo increase the visibility of an article on search engines.

    I did get the message of your story. While you've given an example of people earning $10/hr, studies indicate majority of people in developing country are living on $1/day. You've stated the importance of being grateful with what we have for now since there are others who would like to be where we are in (while at the same time setting goals to improve our life standards). Since many people search online for informative and educative articles, you can help people by showing them how they can improve their living standards, how to stay positive, and so on.

    Don't come out too harsh. Your article is meant to show them the eight direction.

    1. Miebakagh57 profile image74
      Miebakagh57posted 10 months agoin reply to this

      In a developing country like Nigeria, $10 an hour will be highly appreciated.                                       And, working eight hours a week is $5x10x8, or $400.                                              This, convert to local currency is significant.

    2. theraggededge profile image97
      theraggededgeposted 10 months ago

      Of course, there are people earning a lot less, but the article is set in the US. There's no point in making comparisons with developing countries and currency conversions. The writer is talking about minimum wage in a first-world nation.

      1. Ben716 profile image86
        Ben716posted 10 months agoin reply to this

        Ok. Gotcha!

      2. Miebakagh57 profile image74
        Miebakagh57posted 10 months agoin reply to this

        Even so, a very serious and energetic person should work for the maximum working hour and increase their income. It pays well in the end and, can generate savings.

    3. PaulGoodman67 profile image96
      PaulGoodman67posted 10 months ago

      It's an odd HP article (if an article is what it's intended to be).

      It's very unusual to write a magazine-style article in the present tense. To be brutally honest, the article reads more like a (not particularly good) short story.

      It doesn't really argue its case in the conventional sense of a non-fiction article. One would expect a series of factual assertions, arguments and examples, instead it's more like a personal story that's perhaps intended to have an emotional effect on the reader.

      I'm struggling to find much positive to say, or give any suggestions for improvement, other than to recommend that you study what actually gets through the QAP and note the differences in approach.

    4. Stephen Tomkinson profile image91
      Stephen Tomkinsonposted 10 months ago

      I find it a little curious that you have opened two identical Forum posts on the same subject. I stick to what I said on the other - rewrite it as pure fiction.


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