Take a look at this 60DC2 Hub

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   lakeerieartistsposted 14 years ago

   I would love some fresh eyes on my hubs.  I usually write hubs in series, and that is what I did for most of 60dc2.  This is one from the Christmas series, but if you critique this one, it will help me on all of them.
   
   http://hubpages.com/hub/Vintage-Christmas-Garland

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   Cagsilposted 14 years ago

   Hey Lakeerie,
   
   Two things I've noticed:
   
   (a) You have a white space at the bottom where you have three Ebay capsules? I don't know if this is a mistake or done on purpose.
   
   (b) You're missing the keyword 60 day challenge. And, since you are promoting stuff that is yours on Ebay or others. You might considering putting your "hubname" also as a keyword, especially if it is tied to a website. I would think you have some advantage.
   
   Otherwise, I like the layout.

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      lakeerieartistsposted 14 years agoin reply to this

      Hi Cagsil, thanks for the critique.
      
      The white space is just the end of that column on the hub.  Ran out of categories for garlands.  Not sure I will fill it, but thanks for noticing.
      
      What do you mean by adding keyword of hubname and 60 day challenge?  Do you mean tags?
      
      BTW, not my own store on Ebay as I do not have one.

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         Cagsilposted 14 years agoin reply to this

         Hey Lakeerie,
         
         I didn't see the tag "60 Day Challenge" in your keywords, then again, I could have overlooked it. I saw that you had "60dc2".
         
         I add my Hub screenname to all my hubs as a keyword. My screenname is so unique that if searched for by itself, it reveals my profile page and my hubs dominate the search, as well as the forum posts I've made.

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            lakeerieartistsposted 14 years agoin reply to this

            Cagsil, I think you are confusing keywords with tags.  I did not put 60 day challenge as a tag, correct.  I did put 60dc2 as a tag.  I thought that the first one was for the first group of challengers and didn't see a point for it, but Sunforged you can decide here.
            
            As for my name, no, I do not put it as a tag, because it doesn't serve much purpose for me personally.  If I wanted to highlight a group of my own hubs, I would use a tag that you probably wouldn't recognize.
            
            Keywords are used in the text of the hub to draw search engine traffic.  Tags are used internally on Hubpages to categorize the hubs, and on tag pages when someone searches Hubpages for hubs.  I am using tags that will draw people looking for vintage christmas garlands, not as interested in internal traffic although it is welcome of course. 

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         Patty Inglish, MSposted 14 years agoin reply to this

         Sometimes I fill such a space with a photo or a small text blurb.Sometimes a link capsule. I like the Hub, though and rated it up.

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            lakeerieartistsposted 14 years agoin reply to this

            You know, in the edit mode the last capsule goes all the way across.  Didn't even notice that it wasn't in the public mode.

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   Dale Nelsonposted 14 years ago

   Hi There LakeErie,
   
   A great layout. lots of choice.
   
   I would add some text above the hub links module like " Here are some of my other christmas recommendations" or something like that to draw some attention to it, unless thats the idea to keep them on ebay.

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      lakeerieartistsposted 14 years agoin reply to this

      Hi Dale,
      I have struggled with this issue of whether I should have a capsule title on that capsule on several hubs.  I have finally decided in most cases not to because it is obvious that they are links to other related articles. 
      
      However, I would like to hear what others think.

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   lrohnerposted 14 years ago

   Okay, so I completely failed the 60DC2 and haven't kept up with all of the info, but where did keyword stuffing the intro bit start up? This is the second 60DC2 hub that I've read in the last half an hour that has the keyword 10+ times in the first two grafs! I'm sure it will be fine with your readers, but it drives me batty!
   
   Great selection of products, lots of info. Well done.

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      lakeerieartistsposted 14 years agoin reply to this

      Irohner, your point is well taken, and I think that it is a cross between seo and human eyes.  Of course, some people's tolerance is higher than others. 
      
      I know what you mean, and I am not sure what the right answer is.  I would love to hear what some of the "experts" have to say.
      
      Granted you are probably not my typical audience on this, and they would hopefully jump down to the actual products. 
      
      To me keyword stuffing is making a list of keywords and just shoving them in there.  Where do we draw the line?
      
      BTW, have I told you that I love, love your sock puppet?

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      sunforgedposted 14 years agoin reply to this

      outside of suggesting keywords are used within the first sentence and within the optimal on page locations any perceived "stuffing" is a side effect of each authors writing style i imagine.
      
      its not anything you have missed in 60dc info or related sources.
      
      but .. the section that stands out;
      
      "a vintage Christmas tree, vintage Christmas ornaments, vintage Christmas lights, and vintage Christmas garland. Vintage Christmas garlands"
      
      is something I would do also, but I would do it as a quick glance, easy to read bulleted list instead. Not that one way is better than the other - just would make it more accessible in my eyes.
      
          * vintage Christmas tree
          * vintage christmas ornaments
          * vintage garlands etc.

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         lakeerieartistsposted 14 years agoin reply to this

         Hmmm. . .good thought there, I may have to try the bullet list. 

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   LeanManposted 14 years ago

   Hi Lake....
   
   The layout and content seem fine to me. lots of "vintage Christmas xyz....."
   With regard to the titles for the various capsules I think you are missing out on some SEO advantage as I assume each is a header therefore relevant. Leaving them blank is missing an opportunity... "glass garlands", "red garlands", "pink garlands" etc... more to tell Google what your hub is about..

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   LeanManposted 14 years ago

   Just a second comment regarding hub descriptions, whilst the title of this hub is mentioned in the description some of your other 60 day challenge2 hubs fail to have the title in the description...

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      lakeerieartistsposted 14 years agoin reply to this

      Are you talking about the summary blurb or the summary on my list of summaries on my hublog? (Which I still haven't finished *sigh*)

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