For Brenda S. who asks me constantly if I wrote another poem.

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   wesleycoxposted 14 years ago

   Yes I did write another poem.  As I have stated I am in a tough spot right now and have figured out how to word this emotion.
   
   The Beast within
   has always been held
   by a veil, so thin
   its fury unstoppable
   its rage burns unfueled
   ready to commit acts of sin.
   
   The Man, just a shell
   no longer in control
   It is another.
   Go to Hell!
   
   Red vision blurs
   shirt ripped off
   veins poppin and bulging
   all teeth are bared
   the battle begins
   no pain, just violence
   until all men are down
   and there is nothing left but silence!
   
   The End.
   
   I hope you enjoy it.

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   frogdroppingposted 14 years ago

   wesley you should have hubbed it - added some beautiful art.
   
   It's very graphic and I'm sure Brenda will love it

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      wesleycoxposted 14 years agoin reply to this

      I have others so I am not too worried about that.  Thank you for liking it frogdropping.

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   frogdroppingposted 14 years ago

   Funnily enough I was just doing one for brenda that has odd words in it, as per her other thread about new words.
   
   I didn't know you'd written more poetry. I shall go look - though I know nothing about it and don't understand the nuts and bolts of it

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   I*n*v*i*c*t*u*sposted 14 years ago

   awesome poem, wesley! Line for line drives much intensity and depth. You are quite the poet!

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      wesleycoxposted 14 years agoin reply to this

      Well, thank you Invictus, it is the third one I have ever written.

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   \Brenda Scullyposted 14 years ago

   oh i do really really love it, i can't believe it as you thought you could not write poetry.....  well now you know you can..... you seem to be a very sensitive feeling kind a guy but tough also, does that make sense.... so i am thinking your poetry is going to be among my favourites on here...... i just like your style....

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      wesleycoxposted 14 years agoin reply to this

      You are very welcome, I am glad that it made you feel better and that you liked the poem.  I thought of hubbing it after some gentle prodding from frogdropping but I don't know.  Anyway, thanks for the virtual high five.

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   AEvansposted 14 years ago

   That is great my perception is what you are feeling and experienced when you were sent overseas. That was wonderful!

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      wesleycoxposted 14 years agoin reply to this

      Um, actually not really.  It is how I feel right now after coming back.  If you remember I was going to attempt to win my wife over again before I went on leave.  This poem expresses some of those emotions and is clue to how it went.

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   \Brenda Scullyposted 14 years ago

   I   AM    SO   PROUD   OF   YOU

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   Robin Layneposted 14 years ago

   I liked that poem. I wondered if the image you were drawing was of a werewolf. And then I thought of the Incredible Hulk.

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   Robin Layneposted 14 years ago

   I noticed someone new this was about experiences overseas. I take it you were in the military? I have a poem you might like to read that compares someone in the Vietnam war with myself during a period of depression and oversensitivity. If you like, I can post it here, or somewhere else and supply you the link.

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      wesleycoxposted 14 years agoin reply to this

      Whatever you want to do Robin.  All is fair in love and war right.

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    \Brenda Scullyposted 14 years ago

    oh yeah absolutely hub it... go on google images and get some good pictures,,,,,,, you are a star

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       wesleycoxposted 14 years agoin reply to this

       I think I will write a different one to hub.  One about lost love and such.

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          \Brenda Scullyposted 14 years agoin reply to this

          o.k. as long as you keep writing, looking forward to your next hub.... i promise not to pester you this time.... just published a poem 5 minutes ago...

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             wesleycoxposted 14 years agoin reply to this

             Oh, I will get over there as soon as I am off work.  I am actually working right now.  I'll be over in awhile.

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    Jane@CMposted 14 years ago

    I think its a good poem!  I'll have to go check out your other ones, I love good poetry

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       wesleycoxposted 14 years agoin reply to this

       Yes please do.  Thanks.

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    Robin Layneposted 14 years ago

    Okay, I posted the poem. I can't believe it's impossible to paste anything in these forums! I had to retype the whole thing in. Here is the link, also retyped:
    http://hubpages.com/forum/topic/22646
    I'm going to add some other poems to that thread when I have time.

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