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Ahhhhhhhh help me I'm drowning in stuckness!

  1. cindyvine profile image85
    cindyvineposted 7 years ago

    Okay, so I need some urgent help here.  Have just finished the absolutely final edit of the proof copy Createspace sent me.  I don't like my back cover and have redone it.  To be able to order my new proof copy, I have to have it finished.  But i am stuck, so completely and utterly stuck.  I want to make the back cover cause people to buy the book.  After all, i want to sell heaps of copies.  (Don't we all!)  I'm much happier with this blurby thingamebob than I was with my original one.  I want it to end with a question but this is where I am getting stuck.  What question?  What question would make a reader go, "Cool...."  Or maybe, I shouldn't have a question.  Oh help, I'm drowning in stuckness!  Okay, so here's what I've got.

    CHRIS is ready for marriage and parenthood.
    BILLY, his son, wants to be loved and accepted.
    Born with a cleft lip to a mother who abandoned him when he was six months old, it seems that the odds were against Billy from the start.
    Chris develops a relationship with Billy's caregiver, Stella, who turns out to be mentally unstable.
    Chris begins to fear that their lives might be in danger.  With nobody in authority to turn to, Chris is forced to make a difficult decision.
    The Case of Billy B makes one ask the question, "Do we create our own reality?"

    Okay, should it be Do we create our own destiny?  Or should I stick with reality?  Or should I pose a different question, or not have a question?  Or, should I ask Are we the architects of our future or should that be destiny?  OMIGOD I NEED HELP!  Soon!

    1. Mikel G Roberts profile image82
      Mikel G Robertsposted 7 years agoin reply to this

      The Case of Billy B makes Chris ask the question, "Do we create our own reality?"
      Do we create our own destiny?
      What would YOU do?

      That's what I would write, I think.

    2. Cagsil profile image60
      Cagsilposted 7 years agoin reply to this

      Hey Cindy,

      "Does reality bend to our whims?" smile

      "Is our path in life to end at Destiny?" smile

      I'm not sure exactly, if this helps or not. I'm not a book writer, and barely a writer to begin with. But, I gave you a couple of different questions, based on the same questions you posed.

      Thank you. smile

    3. moanalisa profile image58
      moanalisaposted 7 years agoin reply to this

      There seems to be little cohesive about it all. Perhaps find a way to tie it all together in one sentence or question.

  2. tantrum profile image60
    tantrumposted 7 years ago

    I like 'do we create our own reality?'
    it can be also:
    Are there different paths to our destiny?

  3. A.I.D.Y profile image61
    A.I.D.Yposted 7 years ago

    Cindy, these are a few I came up with--maybe these can help...

    'one of the most difficult questions to ask about life is--how to live it?'

    'for each of us, there is one destiny that shapes our ends'.


    Do you need something for each individual? Or just for Billy B?

  4. wyanjen profile image80
    wyanjenposted 7 years ago

    I like "control" instead of "create".

    "Do we control our own reality?"

    good luck smile

    1. tantrum profile image60
      tantrumposted 7 years agoin reply to this

      that's a good one !! big_smile

    2. Mikel G Roberts profile image82
      Mikel G Robertsposted 7 years agoin reply to this

      Me too. (I agree control is a better choice)

    3. Three-Legged Dog profile image73
      Three-Legged Dogposted 7 years agoin reply to this

      I think I like "control" better than "create" too.

    4. darkside profile image83
      darksideposted 7 years agoin reply to this

      I like that. What about asking the same question twice?


      Do we control our own reality? Do we determine our destiny?

  5. cindyvine profile image85
    cindyvineposted 7 years ago

    Thanks so much guys!

  6. wyanjen profile image80
    wyanjenposted 7 years ago

    smile
    Let us know how it turns out

  7. cindyvine profile image85
    cindyvineposted 7 years ago

    Yeah, I like the control, think I'll use that.  The pressure, doing my head in!  Wyan will let you know how it goes.

    1. Mikel G Roberts profile image82
      Mikel G Robertsposted 7 years agoin reply to this

      me too i want to know what you decide on

  8. cindyvine profile image85
    cindyvineposted 7 years ago

    Okay, so 'Do we control our own destiny?' or 'Do we control our own reality?'

  9. profile image0
    RS Wightposted 7 years ago

    Go with destiny.  It's a very universal concept, do we have a choice or is everything up to destiny?  Can we change our destiny or do our choices just lead us to our destiny by one path or another?

  10. wyanjen profile image80
    wyanjenposted 7 years ago

    It's a tough call, but I'd stick with reality.

    Control your destiny - makes me think of Star Wars. smile

    http://www.freesmileys.org/smileys/smiley-sw017.gif

  11. tantrum profile image60
    tantrumposted 7 years ago

    Hello ???? hmm
    yikes
    lol

  12. Mikel G Roberts profile image82
    Mikel G Robertsposted 7 years ago

    <-------Biting tongue....must n ot...go....there....

    1. tantrum profile image60
      tantrumposted 7 years agoin reply to this

      lol

  13. Rochelle Frank profile image94
    Rochelle Frankposted 7 years ago

    seems to me that 'create works better with reality (like a present tense thing) and 'control' works better with destiny (like heading toward a goal).
    On the other hand... I really don't know smile

  14. cindyvine profile image85
    cindyvineposted 7 years ago

    Hmmm how about, Do we create our own reality?  Do we determine our destiny?

    Maybe leave out control if it sounds too Star Wars

    1. TheGlassSpider profile image74
      TheGlassSpiderposted 7 years agoin reply to this

      I like the idea of using the 2 questions you've written above. Those are nice..nice rhythm, nice sound, and thoughtful.

      Good luck!!

  15. cindyvine profile image85
    cindyvineposted 7 years ago

    Okay, I like the determine so much, have moved away from control.

    CHRIS is ready for marriage and parenthood.
    BILLY wants to be loved and accepted.

    Born with a cleft palate, Billy is abandoned by his mother at six months old.
    His father Chris takes on the difficult task of being a single father to a special child.  A relationship develops between Chris and Stella, the caregiver, who turns out to be mentally unstable.

    As the fear intensifies that their lives may be in real danger, Chris realizes he has no one in authority to turn to.  He finds himself forced to make a difficult decision.

    The Case of Billy B grips the reader and asks, "Do we create our own reality?  Do we determine our destiny?"

    1. TheGlassSpider profile image74
      TheGlassSpiderposted 7 years agoin reply to this

      Yes. This is good. smile

  16. wyanjen profile image80
    wyanjenposted 7 years ago

    luuuuuke... i am your faaaaaaatha
    NOOOOOOOOO




    I really like the feel of it with both questions, Cindy.
    Great idea Darkside

    It's an extra tease.

  17. cindyvine profile image85
    cindyvineposted 7 years ago

    Thanks for the help.  I'll be going with this now!

  18. emievil profile image81
    emievilposted 7 years ago

    Good luck cindyvine smile.

 
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