What do u think is the scene behind this poem?

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   Cracknutcaseposted 13 years ago

   Birds are chirping loudly
   And Day is giving way to the night.
   I can feel only silence inside me,
   Making me realize nothing is Alright.
   
   There is a feeling of emptiness left
   And whole lots of memories to regret.
   I feel so battered at this very moment
   Like my heart is burning in a fire torment.
   
   The rushing wind touched my face
   And the tears stormed out of my eyes.
   Ur absence suddenly struck my heart
   And my whole world fell apart.
   
   I don't know what happened,
   Why u left me with so many questions?
   All i know is I loved you
   And now am left with no clue.
   
   Please don't leave me baby
   I'm sure we can work it out.
   Please don't turn deaf to my plea's
   I don't have the strength to shout.
   
   Just tell me u love me
   And I'll be here forever.
   Just tell me u need me
   I'll leave you never!!

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      The Suburban Poetposted 13 years agoin reply to this

      It sounds like someone who lost their lover.... someone they were deeply and romantically in love with...

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         elvitposted 13 years agoin reply to this

         I agree with you.... love has turned sour.

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         Cracknutcaseposted 13 years agoin reply to this

         Yeah U r right Subarban poet.. A girl going through the most excruciating situation , she realises thr was nothing she cud do to make the love of her life stop from leaving her.. He meant everything to her but she has to face the truth that she meant nothing to him, nothing at all..
         Thanks for stopping by

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   Cagsilposted 13 years ago

   I'll hazard to guess- death of a loved one?
   
   Haven't a clue to be honest...just guessing.

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      Cracknutcaseposted 13 years agoin reply to this

      Thank u Cagsil ..
      It is about the pain a girl is going through when she gets dumped by her guy who meant the world to her..

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   ralwusposted 13 years ago

   the scene: a blubbering fool on knees who fukked up

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      Cracknutcaseposted 13 years agoin reply to this

      Lolz...!

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   Jaggedfrostposted 13 years ago

   lol I will have to agree with Ralwus,  honestly  it ended better then it started.  It would be nice if the brevity factor was equal throughout.

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   Pearldiverposted 13 years ago

   Probably Worth Giving Up Your Day Job As Well
   You Could Win the Quinella Here! (that's 1st & 2nd past the post)
   Might As Well Go For It!!!
   Might as well be a loser on both counts!!

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      Joy56posted 13 years agoin reply to this

      that is mean.  Thought you were fond of poetry and poets.

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   Jaggedfrostposted 13 years ago

   I have never, played Quinella here, if you want him to play I am kind of curious how that game goes.

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      Darknlovely3436posted 13 years agoin reply to this

      a devilstating break up

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         Erin LeFeyposted 13 years agoin reply to this

         I'd agree with the break up. obviously. left with questions, without a care, sounds like someone cheated and they do not deserve your begging them to come back.
         I am not sure how one feels silence.... but I would hazard a guess that this relationship is one where both are young people, and there is much to be learned about life and love...and this was one of those relationships where you were just "trying love on for size" and neither party was really ready for a true committment. Its probably time to reassess, learn from it and figure out what it is you really need and want from life. Take it from a bunch of old poets who have loved, lost, loved, left, loved, loved, and loved again. Eventually, you get it right, and you know it
         
         but since the question was to guess the "scene" - I'm taking the question literally. My guess is - sun going down, birds chirping Madly, wind howling
         
         San Francisco near the zoo?  I never claimed to be psychic...

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         Cracknutcaseposted 13 years agoin reply to this

         You have guessed it right Ernie though u don't claim to be a psychic (Is that really the case??).. Young love, stupidity, being in love with the word of love but who says both the parties weren't ready for a commitment or for something more serious??
         Age doesn't really change feelings..
         Lets assume this girl  in the poem has all grown up now and yet she is still dreaming about the guy who ditched her 6 yrs back.. She is still not able to imagine any1 else in his place (though it does sound corny ).. Feels like her feelings are all destroyed.. She is a stone to the world but vulnerable wen it comes down to this guy, her 1st love..
         Thanks for an honest reply

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   Rajab Nsubugaposted 13 years ago

   My guess is, Justin Bieber with 'one more time.'

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   ahorsebackposted 13 years ago

   What's behind this? An awakening ! You just don't know it yet. Beyond one heartbreak lies a Thousand new chances .

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      Cracknutcaseposted 13 years agoin reply to this

      @ahorseback-Beyond one heartbreak lies a thousand feelings that are destroyed and a million  dreams that are shattered

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   Joy56posted 13 years ago

   first i thought it was a death, then it was  more than a death.... the person still alive but out of love.  Your poem is it?????

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      Cracknutcaseposted 13 years agoin reply to this

      Yes.. A girl is brutally dumped by a guy who meant the world to her.. And now here she is being reminded about her pain by Mother nature(Birds,wind etc).

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    tlmntim9posted 13 years ago

    Cracknut case. I like this very much! good rhythm and flow but since you asked for help and advice in other questions I will say that it is better not to use things like U for you, and lots of? I am sure there are better words than this to describe your emotions. With just a little more thought and work this could be a great poem.
    Tim W
    Tlmntim9

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       Cracknutcaseposted 13 years agoin reply to this

       Thanks for the advice Tim It Will surely help me improve my weaker points and help me turn this poem into a much beautiful one..

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