I'd like feedback on my article: For Honor the most intense medieval experience.

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   jonnathanrodrigposted 7 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article For Honor the most intense medieval experience in your consoles (must be signed in to view). What can I do to improve? Thanks!

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      Ivan Hernandezposted 7 years agoin reply to this

      I started reading your hub, and then, not even midway, I just stopped reading. Your spelling and grammar are poor, at best. At least you've got a basic grasp on the English language. An article is just like a city. If you have too much crime and daily fire rescues and corruption issues and unemployment, not to mention uneducated workers and vehicle traffic and pollution, then your city won't function correctly and it will have less citizens. Iron out the grammar issues and all of your article's problems, and you will be on the highway to getting your article published.
      
      Good luck on your article.

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   Jeremy Gillposted 7 years ago

   There are two glaring issues with this Hub:
   
   1) It desperately needs to be proofread; there are too many spelling and grammar errors to list. Also, capitalize key words in headings and your title.
   2). Your Hub is too short; aim for at least 700 words. It also ends quite abruptly, with no rating, summary, or other way to tie your information together.
   
   You did use a photo, video, and callout, so nice job there, but until the copious grammar errors are corrected, this Hub will immediately turn away viewers. Good luck.

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      jonnathanrodrigposted 7 years agoin reply to this

      thanks you so much, i will do my best to improve granmmar , english is not my native language so i will do my best

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         theraggededgeposted 7 years agoin reply to this

         The problem is that HubPages is aimed at an English speaking readership, so your English needs to be of a high standard.

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            Ivan Hernandezposted 7 years agoin reply to this

            Bev's right. Your English must be of the highest quality. Otherwise, you could end up like a certain guy who wrote an article that was so bad, I unknowingly attacked him and his article. I got banned from the forums for a week after that. Remember, HubPages wants original, in-depth, high-quality articles that can't be searched anywhere else and that Google is waiting to sink its humongous teeth into and bite it into popularity. Keep improving on the article. You'll get it.

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      jonnathanrodrigposted 7 years agoin reply to this

      https://hubpages.com/games-hobbies/For- … r-consoles please check it now

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         Jeremy Gillposted 7 years agoin reply to this

         The link didn't work, but I used the original to see your changes. You've made some progress, but like theraggededge noted, getting your work published will be difficult without mastery of the English language. There are still several spelling and grammar errors to fix.
         
         If you're confident that your level of English proficiency will let you publish error-free articles (necessary for getting your writing featured), keep writing and editing; otherwise, this may require more time and effort than you'd like to invest.

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            Ivan Hernandezposted 7 years agoin reply to this

            At this rate, it may take you weeks of editing to get your article featured. Heed theraggededge's advice, and you'll get your article featured in no time.

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      jonnathanrodrigposted 7 years agoin reply to this

      Please check it. Today got all grammar issues revised, but they still unpublish my hub

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   FatFreddysCatposted 7 years ago

   Anything I could add at this point would simply be "piling on," so I'll just say "Yeah, what they all said."

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   Mary Florenceposted 7 years ago

   There should be a colon between 'honor' and 'the' in your title. Every first letter of every word of that title should be in upper-case.
   And you post long sentences then instead of ending with a comma, you place

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   Mary Florenceposted 7 years ago

   You should put a colon between 'honor' and 'the' in your title. Every first letter of every word of that title should be in upper-case.
   
   Apart from the numerous spelling mistakes, you post very long sentences then instead of ending with a fullstop, you place a comma. Sentences should be paused with commas, ended with fullstops and the letter after any fullstop should be in upper-case.

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      Ivan Hernandezposted 7 years agoin reply to this

      Did you just double-post a sentence?

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   jonnathanrodrigposted 7 years ago

   where

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   JynBrantonposted 7 years ago

   i looked at what is up now with the changes and its looking pretty good. i have done a few game reviews too and its hard to find an audience some times. i like that you break up the content with videos and callouts, but as jeremy said too there are some spelling and grammatical errors still. i usually write in a word template when i can and and see what corrections it suggest and then have friends give it a read as well to see what they spot.  do you follow the tutorial template? the first thing i submitted was kicked back to me for editing when i tried to use the basic , but using the tutorial and making sure to add things like polls, links, videos, etc really does help. i plug in things exactly how the template is set up and minus my initial article i submitted, everything i have right now is featured.

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      Ivan Hernandezposted 7 years agoin reply to this

      I looked at your article. It should be "never before seen" NOT "never after seen" which caught me off guard. Your grammar has improved considerably, except for the text near the top. Remember what they and myself told you, and your article will become featured soon.

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   IsraelMercadoposted 7 years ago

   I love video games.  This article is poised to be a great article.  Just as the people have said before, the grammar needs to be cleaned up both word usage and some sentence structure as well.  I suggest taking this article to a friend that knows the English language well so that they can help you make this a more smoother read.  Good luck!  I hope you get this article featured soon.

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   jonnathanrodrigposted 7 years ago

   Please check it. Today got all grammar issues revised, but they still unpublish my hub. I need your help my hubbers

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      Ivan Hernandezposted 7 years agoin reply to this

      I checked it. You have many punctuation issues. What I would recommend is the free grammar checker, which is here https://www.grammarcheck.net/editor/ (NOT AN AFFILIATE LINK) and check out the issues.

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         jonnathanrodrigposted 7 years agoin reply to this

         thanks a lot my friend, I tried it lets check if hubpages thinks its fine now

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            Ivan Hernandezposted 7 years agoin reply to this

            Youre welcome. Remember that in my 26th article, I had to wait 48 hours before it became published.

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               jonnathanrodrigposted 7 years agoin reply to this

               only one more thing, could you check my hub and tll me wich of my links is called spamy content_ it was unpublushed mecause of that, and i dont know what it means

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                  Ivan Hernandezposted 7 years agoin reply to this

                  spammy content refers to links in your article that promotes a certain product, donations, or is an affiliate link itself. If you have those, then that's an indicator that your article is spammy. Also, if there are too many promotional links or videos in your article, then the article is considered not featured. Have you read the FAQs on Spammy Elements? Maybe someone else will help you with that.

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                     jonnathanrodrigposted 7 years agoin reply to this

                     thats it my bro, it have been published, not featured because they say its low quality. but  it is finally alive

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    theraggededgeposted 7 years ago

    Google 'title case', then edit your title and subtitles accordingly. As it stands, it looks a tad unprofessional.

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    jonnathanrodrigposted 7 years ago

    ohhhhhhhhh sweat jesus. i have been drafted again i do not really know what do i need to do now please .

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       Jeremy Gillposted 7 years agoin reply to this

       What you posted is hilarious, but I think you mean "sweet" lol.
       
       Good news, this is much better than when I last looked. Still a few minor quirks. For example, the grammar error in "did you liked this review?" On that subject, I'd ask a different poll question, like "Do you enjoy For Honor?" and then give yes or no options.
       
       Be sure to always capitalize both words in For Honor, and Elder Scrolls when you mention them. Some phrases aren't technically wrong but are awkward, like "Fight On Your Style"
       
       A bit more editing, and you'll be there.

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          Ivan Hernandezposted 7 years agoin reply to this

          What he said.

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