I'd like feedback on my article: Dining in BUFFET 101, another eat all you can..

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   Maria Ceciliaposted 7 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article Dining in BUFFET 101, another eat all you can experience.. What can I do to improve? Thanks!                        This hub was featured for the longest time or for years, tried to revise it, thumbnail the photos etc. and then I received feedback it was no longer featured. Please help me improve this hub and I will try to comply.....I feel really disappointed that one of my best was defeatured right after i thought I improved it..
   
   Thank so much

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   Bede le Venerableposted 7 years ago

   Maria Cecilia, you have a potentially good article here, but it needs work. For starters, the intro is very confusing. Get straight to the point instead of meandering about the shuttle service, etc.
   
   A good way rework your intro is to take the first paragraph of your conclusion and make it the opening paragraph; "...Delicious foods, over flowing quality and quantity of foods served, large space enough to accommodate large group of people, cleanliness of the facilities, courteous waiters.” I suggest that a good way to order your article is by going through each quality as a chapter heading.
   
   Also, your tone is somewhat too casual, as though you were speaking on the phone.
   
   Here is a helpful article for proper capitalization:
   
   https://hubpageshelp.com/standards/Lear … iting-Tips
   
   Finally, some grammar is faulty and spelling: “Collie flower” should be cauliflower,etc.

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   Bede le Venerableposted 7 years ago

   Maria, here is a possible intro taking your last paragraph, in case I wasn’t clear. It’s only a suggestion. I reworked your wording slightly.
   
   “For me a popular buffet restaurant has the following characteristics: variety of delicious food served, quantity, large space enough to accommodate large group of people, cleanliness of the facilities, and courteous waiters. On a recent visit to Buffet 101, I was pleased to find a restaurant that fulfills all these conditions. Let’s look at how it fairs in each category.
   
   Delicious Food (this can be a subtitle)
   
   Describe here the quality of the food, etc.
   
   I recommend capitalizing the title like this:
   Dining in Buffet 101: Another All You Can Eat Experience

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   Maria Ceciliaposted 7 years ago

   Thanks so much Bede le Venerable, I was really looking at my intro before I saw your comment and you are right.   I am thinking about your suggestion and I will try to work on it on weekend. Thanks so much you are very helpful

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