I'd like feedback on my article: Heartburn

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  1. farahwaqas profile image61
    farahwaqasposted 4 weeks ago

    Hi Hubbers,

    I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article? What can I do to improve? Thanks!
    Here is my article: Heartburn (must be signed in to view)

    1. theraggededge profile image97
      theraggededgeposted 4 weeks agoin reply to this

      Hi there,

      You need to add an article bio that details your medical or other relevant qualifications. You cannot give medical advice or recommend medication without having the required expertise.

      This article is very, very similar to other articles on the web. It may have triggered the duplicate content filter.

      1. farahwaqas profile image61
        farahwaqasposted 4 weeks agoin reply to this

        thankyou for your help, I would definitely consider your advice. Thanks for your time and help.

    2. AliciaC profile image97
      AliciaCposted 4 weeks agoin reply to this

      Another problem is that you've only given one reference, though you've called it a resource. This might cause some people to wonder why you've written the article if everything is in the resource. You need to add value to the article in some way, since as theraggededge says it's very similar to other ones on the web.

      You should at least include a synthesis of information from several reputable sources (written in your own words, of course). You could also include an analysis of the information or describe your personal experience with the disorder in order to differentiate the article from other ones on the web. The references that you use should be listed.

      You should follow theraggededge's advice about adding a relevant bio. You should also add information to the "About" section of your profile. It's important that readers know that you have a relevant qualification that enables you to write the article. In addition, I doubt whether a one-word title will impress the search engines.

    3. farahwaqas profile image61
      farahwaqasposted 4 weeks agoin reply to this

      Thank all of you for giving your valuable advice, I will surely work on them. Last question. I have a MBBS degree from abroad. I have knowledge in the field of medicine very well but due to some personal reasons, I can't work at the moment. At the same time, I don't want to ruin my degree and education. Medical writing is a good option for me. Could you please tell me, how and what should I write in medicine which gets approved and liked by the readers? You all must be perfect in writing and might be in this profession for long. I am really new in the writing field, secondly, English is not my first language. But I have heard, if you work hard, you can achieve anything. I am quite motivated and optimistic, I just want a true guide.

      1. theraggededge profile image97
        theraggededgeposted 4 weeks agoin reply to this

        We can't tell you what articles to write - that's part of learning the skill. We are all on that path - you have to do your research and find out what people are looking for. The problem is that health issues are very well covered so you have to find a new way of approaching your topics.

        Just as inspiration, go look at the videos on YouTube by MotivationalDoc. He's taken a new approach, which works really well.

        1. farahwaqas profile image61
          farahwaqasposted 4 weeks agoin reply to this

          let me see him on youtube.I have read your article today about how to write an article in which you highlighted some common mistakes.I also noticed the way you write.

      2. AliciaC profile image97
        AliciaCposted 4 weeks agoin reply to this

        As a doctor, you must know many fascinating and important facts that you could discuss in your articles. I suggest that you first focus on getting your article featured so that you can see how HubPages works. If your articles don't pass the Quality Assessment Process, you won't earn money from them. If you want to make money, it's vital that you learn what HubPages wants before you write more articles.

        1. farahwaqas profile image61
          farahwaqasposted 4 weeks agoin reply to this

          Your are right,I was thinking that same.

      3. melbel profile image95
        melbelposted 4 weeks agoin reply to this

        Look at articles that do well (look at HubPages' health site) and see what you can change on your article to make it more like those articles. Write complete sentences. Don't just list words.

  2. Kenna McHugh profile image92
    Kenna McHughposted 4 weeks ago

    Your formating is off, and you need a bio and title. Heartburn is not a title.

    1. farahwaqas profile image61
      farahwaqasposted 4 weeks agoin reply to this

      What do you mean by formatting is off? I mean what I would do to improve my formatting. I am working to change my title and I am about to write my bio

  3. farahwaqas profile image61
    farahwaqasposted 4 weeks ago

    THANKS, I will edit these mistakes

  4. farahwaqas profile image61
    farahwaqasposted 4 weeks ago

    I am a doctor by profession, I have many personal experiences to share and I hope I will include in my articles too. Another thing is, I have searched for the writing articles they say that the less is more, that's why  I kept my writing precise.
    I am also scared of Copywrite problems. I have visited NHS,webmed and pubmed websites and I have seen there work, I tried to include info from there but they might sue or complain about me, this fear doesn't let me do what I want. My prior idea when I started to write was to write medical knowledge in a simpler way, as it is quite complex with and it has its own complicated terminologies so that non-medical audiences can understand it truly.
    Plz help me out how can I use my medical knowledge in writing and how I can use NHS ,webmed, PubMed information without any fear, although, I am ready to acknowledge them in my writing.

    1. theraggededge profile image97
      theraggededgeposted 4 weeks agoin reply to this

      You cannot copy and paste any information from other sites. It must be written entirely in your own words. You can use those sites as references to back up your own writing. Link to them at the end of the article.

      If you have qualifications, then say so in the bio. Make sure to complete the 'About' on your profile page too, so that editors can confirm your expertise. As a doctor, you should use your real name.

      Writing up medical conditions in a simple way is a good idea. However, you will be competing with those sites you mention, which are published with the non-medical reader in mind.

      You really need to change the title, something like, The Causes of Heartburn and How to Cure It.

    2. DrMark1961 profile image97
      DrMark1961posted 4 weeks agoin reply to this

      Whoever told you less is more is giving very outdated and incorrect advice.

      Your article needs to be thorough. Use NIH articles, and reference them, and provide as much up to the date advice and info as possible. If you do not do this, your article is of no benefit to anyone.

    3. AliciaC profile image97
      AliciaCposted 4 weeks agoin reply to this

      Write information that you find at the NIH, NHS, and other medical websites (or in printed sources) in your own words. Do not copy passages from the sites. They won't sue you or complain about you if you do this and if you list the organizations in your references section.

      You can even mention a source in your article, such as by saying "According to the NIH......" and then writing the facts that you've discovered in your own words. Following this format multiple times would be repetitive, though. In addition, you must still mention the article or section of the website that you used as a resource in the references section at the end of your article.

      1. farahwaqas profile image61
        farahwaqasposted 4 weeks agoin reply to this

        Thanks for your lovely advice and reviwing my work .From now,I will work on it.

  5. DrMark1961 profile image97
    DrMark1961posted 4 weeks ago

    Almost no one is going to read an article with a title like heartburn. If you write "12 Lifestyle Changes You Can Make to Stop Your Heartburn" potential readers will click on it and read. People are not looking for a medical article. They are looking for something that will help their medical condition.

    1. farahwaqas profile image61
      farahwaqasposted 4 weeks agoin reply to this

      I don't know where I am heading. My main purpose was to pick any disease and write about it in order to bring awareness.

    2. farahwaqas profile image61
      farahwaqasposted 4 weeks agoin reply to this

      I am a doctor. I want to pursue my carrier as a medical writer. I love to write and I want to publish a few medical writings so that I could make my portfolio. Do you think is it the right platform for me or I try my luck somewhere else to write about medical-related stuff? Your help will be appreciated. I need a true guide, I am really puzzled now.

      1. DrMark1961 profile image97
        DrMark1961posted 4 weeks agoin reply to this

        I am a veterinarian, and mostly interested in holistic and alternative medicine. I have found that my most successful articles have been on solving situations through alternative therapies (coconut oil to moisturize dry skin, for example).
        If you are just hoping to write standard medical articles, webmd probably already has it covered. You would need to look hard for something that has not been written about, and I doubt you will ever find it. If you have specific knowledge on how to cure specific problems, and are willing to share that, this place can be a great place to write.

  6. farahwaqas profile image61
    farahwaqasposted 4 weeks ago

    thankyou for your advice,from now i will work on it.

    1. CYong74 profile image96
      CYong74posted 4 weeks agoin reply to this

      I think there's a lot of difference between brevity and superficiality. Brevity in writing is a skill, and a valuable one at that.

      Most medical-like articles online are also, to me, one of three types. Blatant sales sites, the truly simplistic and irresponsible, and the invaluable. For me, I strongly prefer the third type, esp those offers an expansive but terse rundown of an illness or symptom. Looking at your hub, I think it has the potential for the third category. You just need to work on structure and phrasing. And don't worry too much about copyright. As long as you write everything yourself, there wouldn't be that issue.

      1. farahwaqas profile image61
        farahwaqasposted 4 weeks agoin reply to this

        Thanks for your words:)

 
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