I'd like feedback on my article: Jesus Healed Them All - Putting Faith in...

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   Jackie Lynnleyposted 6 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article [url=https://hubpages.com/religion-philosophy/Jesus-Healed-Them-All]Jesus Healed Them All -
        Putting Faith in Prayer and the Word of God[/url]. What can I do to improve? Thanks!

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      Jackie Lynnleyposted 6 years agoin reply to this

      Tell you people, there is nothing I can find wrong now on this hub and I have listened to all ideas and worked on them, I know what I have to do and pretty sure it will work unless there is an anti-Christ editing these. Just take it down and redo it. Just hate that for the ones who have bothered to comment. I am truly sorry. I am not about to delete and forget about it. Not going to happen. Thank Marisa and Linda, I really appreciate your help.

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         Marisa Wrightposted 6 years agoin reply to this

         I think you're right.  The heart of the Hub is good, but it needs quite a bit of rearranging to refocus it, so it might be easier just to wipe it and start again.  However, couldn't you just delete the text and rewrite it, rather than deleting the whole Hub?  or do you feel the comments would be irrelevant by the time you'd done that?

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            Jackie Lynnleyposted 6 years agoin reply to this

            I did more or less do that even making the whole thing lose what it was meant for but it made no difference. I just hate it for the ones who commented and Theresa but I will make it a whole new hub with the same theme. It will be OK and I will take my time. Been a lot of years since this has happened to me my hubs feature so fast. Sort of reminding me of that place we both quit (probably for way different reasons) but mine was I was not allowed to say Jesus or talk about Him. I see many here do though so surely that is not the case here.
            Again, thanks!

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   paradigmsearchposted 6 years ago

   I'm curious. Do religion articles really get organic traffic? This is a serious question; I could do a boatload of them.

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      Jackie Lynnleyposted 6 years agoin reply to this

      Well it is getting hits not even featured. It was important to me and HP stresses importance of our personal experience of article we write, which is true here. I don't expect some to understand but I know there are many who do.
      What I find puzzling is it is written like all my other articles and they have no problem whatsoever featuring. In fact I have a new one today https://hubpages.com/literature/Wistful-Winter-Memories and I bet it wasn't even two hours featuring. I also have one about a friend who died so why not one about a friend who prayed for me? These articles are about life and all these things are a part of it.
      There are plenty of Christian articles at HP and I cannot see it is not as good or as important as them, so I appreciate your effort to help but I think you have missed the mark. Maybe someone else can help, though, with a clue.

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         paradigmsearchposted 6 years agoin reply to this

         You have no idea how I can help.

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            Jackie Lynnleyposted 6 years agoin reply to this

            No honey, just go do a boatload of your own. I don't write for money but from the heart. I guess we would never see each others point of view. Thanks for the offer.

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               paradigmsearchposted 6 years agoin reply to this

               Bolding by me.
               
               Since you brought the subject up, I disagree. I assign probabilities, as opposed to absolutes; nothing more.

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                  Jackie Lynnleyposted 6 years agoin reply to this

                  Christian, not religion. Absolute, not just possibilities.

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                     paradigmsearchposted 6 years agoin reply to this

                     "Christian, not religion."
                     
                     Are you serious?
                     
                     !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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   Marisa Wrightposted 6 years ago

   HubPages doesn't want Hubs that are purely about personal experience.  They say they want us to share our personal experience in a way that's useful to others.
   
   Reading your Hub, I think it passes that test, so I'm not sure why it hasn't been Featured.  I'm wondering if the moderator has been a bit lazy and only read the beginning?  Maybe try rewording the beginning to make it clearer that you're not just talking about yourself.
   
   By the way, your second example is under the category "Creative Writing", and Hubs in that category don't have to pass that test.

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      Jackie Lynnleyposted 6 years agoin reply to this

      Marisa, I did try it in creative writing and that didn't go over either. I took out what I thought was important, not personal because it kept saying it may be considered commercial so now it probably does look more personal except I believe in the power of prayer and what this one prayer did for me and how healing should never fail if we can find that secret. Do I have it? No. I try all the things I know such as giving God's word back to Him. I offer what helps me.
      Thank you for helping and thinking it should go through.
      You think then I should make it creative writing?

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         Marisa Wrightposted 6 years agoin reply to this

         That is just weird.  I do feel like it should go in the religion category because it's not a fictional story.  I think it would get more readers in the right category. 
         
         I'd suggest taking out the line, "This writing is about that and my personal experience."  Maybe moderators are reading that and jumping to conclusions.  I would also consider writing a different introduction that says something about how friends can help each other through prayer, then suggesting opportunities to do that and ways it can be done, and then offering your own experience as an example.

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            Jackie Lynnleyposted 6 years agoin reply to this

            Thanks Marisa, I will take a new look at it in the morning and try your suggestions. Appreciate your time.

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               paradigmsearchposted 6 years agoin reply to this

               I wish you well, I was just kind of shocked.

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   AliciaCposted 6 years ago

   Hi, Jackie. Your hub is interesting (as always), but I suspect that it needs to be proofread very carefully in order to be featured. Here are two examples of the problems that I saw.
   
   Second paragraph: That helps me out more than any in times of stress a powerlessness to find the words I need. (The meaning of this sentence isn't clear. Words seem to have been left out.)
   
   In the third paragraph of Theresa's prayer you mention a blot clot instead of a blood clot.
   
   There are other errors, too. I know from experience that it's sometimes hard to see mistakes in our own writing. Perhaps reading the article aloud or asking a relative or friend to read it would be helpful. Good luck with getting the article featured.

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      Jackie Lynnleyposted 6 years agoin reply to this

      I took the whole hub out and put it section by section in word document and so that is the only way I can see having confusing sentence, thank you. I will correct that and read over it again because I am afraid I trusted the word document fix without checking. Very stupid of me but going over and over it to start with I could find no mistakes and saw nothing else I could do. I even took out a section about suicide and prayer and trust there I thought very important but someone suggested it had no place in my story.
      Thanks again for pointing this out, I did not spell check Theresa's letter of course and did not notice the typo, so thank you so much!
      I will go now and check out the first you mentioned and fix hers.

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