I'd like feedback on my article: 8 Things You Should Give a Chance for...

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   Gargi Srivastavaposted 4 years ago

   Hi Hubbers,
   
   I'd like some help with passing the Quality Assessment Process. Will you please give feedback on my article? What can I do to improve? Thanks!
   Here is my article: 8 Things You Should Give a Chance for Improving Quality of Your Life

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      RTalloniposted 4 years agoin reply to this

      This helpful guide can help you pass the QAP.

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         Gargi Srivastavaposted 4 years agoin reply to this

         Thank you

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      Ryan Corneliusposted 4 years agoin reply to this

      Pictures will help it along with fixing the errors. When I first started writing articles I had many and never knew until a specialist told me. So I know what you are experiencing here. Well written article. Its just the errors you must fix

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         Gargi Srivastavaposted 4 years agoin reply to this

         Thank you

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   Kenna McHughposted 4 years ago

   It is written well but doesn't follow HP style guidelines. Here is the link https://hubpageshelp.com/standards/HubP … tyle-Guide

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      Gargi Srivastavaposted 4 years agoin reply to this

      Thank you

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   AliciaCposted 4 years ago

   Your article is certainly a lot better than the first one that some people create for HubPages. It does contain some English errors, though. Perhaps you could check the article again yourself or maybe you know someone who could go through the article and point out the errors to you.

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      Gargi Srivastavaposted 4 years agoin reply to this

      Thank you for the appreciation. I'll proofread for any grammatical mistakes. ☺️

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   yusrat19posted 4 years ago

   i think you need to add some pictures. Plus there are some english errors.

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      Gargi Srivastavaposted 4 years agoin reply to this

      Can you point out a few. I have re-read the article but I am unable to find them. My article again failed the QAP.

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         theraggededgeposted 4 years agoin reply to this

         Hi there,
         
         Your title is grammatically 'awkward'. Try '8 Small Steps to Improve the Quality of Your Life'.
         
         Your first paragraph could be improved:
         
         "Ever think of getting better at handling your life. Sometimes at the end of the day, we hope we had better relationships, a little better health and little more of everything. This article is not a know-it-all, but you can try these small steps to see if you ever have a chance."
         
         "Do you ever think your life could be improved? Often at the end of the day, we wish we'd got along with other people better. Perhaps looked after ourselves and generally made more of an effort. Try these 8 small steps to make life more fulfilling."
         
         My suggestion is to read your article out loud and see if you can spot any clunky sentences. Reading aloud uses a different part of the brain and can highlight issues you wouldn't notice otherwise. Better still ask someone else to read it.
         
         Put your subheadings into title case and lose those exclamation points after Exercise.
         
         Try those things first and see how it goes

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            Gargi Srivastavaposted 4 years agoin reply to this

            Thank you

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            Gargi Srivastavaposted 4 years agoin reply to this

            Hi, I have incorporated the changes you mentioned and since then I have also proof read the article twice. Still my article has failed the QAP. Can you please help me?

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   Gargi Srivastavaposted 4 years ago

   I will proof read the article. Thanks for the suggestion.

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   Kenna McHughposted 4 years ago

   Nice, Bev!

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   Kenna McHughposted 4 years ago

   Hi Gargi,
   
   You need to supply the link to the article. The other link is no longer valid.

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      Gargi Srivastavaposted 4 years agoin reply to this

      The link is now active.
      
      http://hub.me/amVC3

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   Kenna McHughposted 4 years ago

   I took a quick look to see what could be done to improve your article. One thing I noticed is there are no sources or references. You wrote: "Researchers say we are the average of the five people we live with. So, better be with people who are positive and lively." Who are the researchers? You need to cite your source. It gives you and your article credibility.
   
   For example, Dr. Grove, who authored the bestseller Relentless, and taught Michael Jordan to jump even higher, states in his book about being successful, "The people you spend time with..."
   
   The guidelines explain this aspect a bit further https://hubpageshelp.com/standards/HubP … tyle-Guide

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      Gargi Srivastavaposted 4 years agoin reply to this

      Thank you for the suggestion.

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   Gargi Srivastavaposted 4 years ago

   I am thankful for your suggestions for the improvement of my article. Yet my article didn't pass the QAP. I'm unable to understand the reason. Please help me with more suggestions on improving my article.

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    Kenna McHughposted 4 years ago

    You have to post the current link

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       Gargi Srivastavaposted 4 years agoin reply to this

       Posted.

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    Kenna McHughposted 4 years ago

    Review the guidelines, again. Though, you added one source that is not enough, and the guidelines explain this. Also, you don't have a bio, the guidelines explain how to do this as well. All the advice you are offering needs to have a source unless you are an expert in these areas, which reflects in your bio and gives credence to the article.

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    AliciaCposted 4 years ago

    There are a few English errors left in the article. For example, the third sentence in the "Communicate" section should say "will" improve your relationships beyond imagination.
    
    As Kenna has said, I think adding more references would be useful, especially when you start to recommend fitness activities. I find the suggestion that people learn to do a headstand a bit worrying. The pose can be harmful if it's not done correctly. It's probably not a good idea to suggest that people new to exercise learn how to perform the activity.

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    Gargi Srivastavaposted 4 years ago

    Thank you everyone for your suggestions on the improvement of my article. My article has now passed the QAP and is now featured. Thank you for your love and support.

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       theraggededgeposted 4 years agoin reply to this

       Congratulations

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    Kenna McHughposted 4 years ago

    That's great news! Good job!

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