The Curse ~ The Treasure of Calibishie (Final Chapter)

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   Pamela99posted 2 years ago

   Be sure to read John's final chapter telling us of pirate's treasure. This is a story based on the prompt 'treasure'. It is s very good conclusion.
   
   https://hubpages.com/literature/The-Cur … al-Chapter

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      Jodahposted 2 years agoin reply to this

      Pamela, thank you for sharing the final chapter of the story. Much appreciated.

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         Carb Divaposted 2 years agoin reply to this

         Wow John, you certainly know how to tell a story. Sounds like an Indiana Jones tale.

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            Jodahposted 2 years agoin reply to this

            Hi Linda, thank you for reading the story.  Wonder if they need a screen-writer for any future Indiana Jones movies lol. Thank you.

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      ChitrangadaSharanposted 2 years agoin reply to this

      Hello John!
      I have followed your story, The Treasure of Calibishie, and enjoyed reading all the three parts.  Well weaved story, with the perfect conclusion. You have great imagination and great story telling skills.
      Thank you for sharing this interesting read.
      Thank you Pamela, for sharing John’s story.

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         Jodahposted 2 years agoin reply to this

         I am glad you enjoyed the story, Chitrangada. Thank you so much for reading and for the generous comment. I am pleased the conclusion worked out okay.

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   Misbah786posted 2 years ago

   Wow…. What a beautiful ending, John. I enjoyed all the three parts of this story. I enjoyed this part of the story very much “The doubloon scored a direct hit……. “POP!” and his eyeball exploded”. I read it twice and tried to imagine the scene. I loved it. Thank you so much for sharing.
   
   Thank you so much, Pamela, for creating this forum discussion.
   
   Have a great day and keep smiling
   Blessings to both of you

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      surovi99posted 2 years agoin reply to this

      This was an awesome final chapter with a great ending. I went through the other parts as well to revive my memory. It made me smile that the main character couldn't get hold of the cursed treasure but had a picture of it to tell the tale to others. Yes, it was a fitting end to the story. I appreciate it very much. Thanks for the entertainment in the lovely afternoon here, John.

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         Jodahposted 2 years agoin reply to this

         Hi Rosina, I am happy that you enjoyed this story. I wasn't sure how it would end as I never planned the story, I just wrote as ideas came to me. It is great that it entertained you and that you were happy with the way it ended. Take care.

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            vidsagsterposted 2 years agoin reply to this

            Great ending to a wonderful story, John. I enjoyed reading all the three parts. You are truly a gifted story teller. Thanks for sharing Pamela.

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               Jodahposted 2 years agoin reply to this

               Hello Vidya, thank you for your kind comment. I am pleased that you enjoyed all three parts of the story.

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   Misbah786posted 2 years ago

   A cookie monster here again
   
   
   

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      Jodahposted 2 years agoin reply to this

      so it appears

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         Misbah786posted 2 years agoin reply to this

         Yes, he should be punished.
         
         So here's my comment again
         
         Wow…. What a beautiful ending, John. I enjoyed all the three parts of this story. I enjoyed this part of the story very much “The doubloon scored a direct hit……. “POP!” and his eyeball exploded”. I read it twice and tried to imagine the scene. I loved it. Thank you so much for sharing. smile
         
         Thank you so much, Pamela, for creating this forum discussion.
         
         Have a great day and keep smiling
         Blessings to both of you smile

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            Jodahposted 2 years agoin reply to this

            Yay, I got your comment this time, Misbah. I don't know why it didn't show up before. I didn't know why you mentioned the cookie monster. I thought maybe the link wasn't working. I am glad you enjoyed all three parts, especially the gory bit lol. Thanks again, my friend Blessings to you.

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               Misbah786posted 2 years agoin reply to this

               No worries, dear friend!
               
               He is also capable of devouring the entire article. Please be careful!!!
               
               Blessings always!

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   billybucposted 2 years ago

   A rousing thriller with a great ending. Who could ask for more? Loved the story. Poetry or short story, you bridge the gap effortlessly.  Truly a talented writer/poet, and a pleasure to have read lo these many years.

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      Jodahposted 2 years agoin reply to this

      Bill, you don’t know how much I appreciate your feedback, and a comment like that does a lot for my confidence in writing short fiction. I have been trying my hand at it more often lately, so practicing may not make perfect but it does help one improve. As I have said to others, I am very relieved the ending worked out well. That was what I was most worried about.

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   Venkatachari Mposted 2 years ago

   A wonderful, mesmerizing story, Dear John! I got fully immersed in that descriptive narration of the full tale. Very well done. I appreciate you very much for this nice piece.

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      Jodahposted 2 years agoin reply to this

      Hello Venkatchari. It is great to receive a comment from you. I am humbled that you found the story mesmerizing but very glad it kept you immersed throughout. Thank you for your kind words.

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   Venkatachari Mposted 2 years ago

   And, thanks Pamela for sharing it so that I could express my feelings.

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   Peggy Wposted 2 years ago

   Thanks Pamela for sharing the gripping ending to John's pirate treasure story.  He surely knows how to spin a captivating story!

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      Jodahposted 2 years agoin reply to this

      Thank you for reading my story, Peggy.

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   Brenda Arledgeposted 2 years ago

   John
   I finally got to read your conclusion.
   
   I must say it grabs your attention.
   Very descriptive from the beginning to the end.
   
   Sometimes it's best to get the hell out of dodge and live your life.
   
   What a curse.  I can only imagine what else his fate met up with when he decided to be greedy.
   
   Great job on this one.  I'll post a link to the word prompt article.

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      Jodahposted 2 years agoin reply to this

      Hello, Brenda. I enjoyed writing this story. It was a little diversion from my usual poetry. Thank you for reading.

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