I left the tunnel for the light,
Forever it seemed our lives in darkness dwelled,
You pushed on for the greatest heights,
I was confined by stone.
Throughout our blissful ignorance we swayed,
The colours fading on our days,
This life’s too small for us to say it all,
And so we part without a word.
Blinkered by each other’s shadows,
We fought to hide each other from the world.
Let falling stars not block our path,
We chanted through our minds.
Forget the fallacious part we played!
Two lovers fighting each other,
We wielded our love against one another.
I turned my cheek ten thousand times,
You beat me down with gentle rhymes,
The laughter and the flowing tides;
The place where love and hate collides.
Hi, I put this up for two reasons, one to maybe provide a small sample of what I do, but mostly for the purpose of deciding upon a title. All suggestions appreciated ^^
"Turned my cheek ten thousand times" sounds great to me. Nice, very nice. I like it.
I agree with pay...Where Love and Hate Collide would make a nice title for this one
The first idea seems perfect to me, since it would wraps things up nicely and bring the entire poem together wonderfully ,
Don't know about a title sorry, although the other suggestions are good. Great piece though.
"Rubicon Romance" but I don't think that many people would get its meaning. However, that may be all the more reason to use it.
I like "Where Love and Hate Collide" but it's a bit predictable, isn't it?
Poppa's suggestion seems to be consistent, to me, with the kind of images you use.
Great poem, btw.
The only issue with that is I don't understand its meaning XD
True, it is predictable, I'll leave the discussion open and think some more myself as well XD I'll decide tomorrow
I've heard the phrase but was unclear myself, so I looked it up. Rubicon basically means "point of no return." Here's the dictionary definition if it helps you decide:
Rubicon is a 29 km long river in northern Italy. The river flows from the Apennine Mountains to the Adriatic Sea through the southern Emilia-Romagna region between the towns of Rimini and Cesena.
"Crossing the Rubicon" is a popular idiom meaning to pass a point of no return. This phrase is often used by journalists in newspapers. It refers to Caesar's 49 BC crossing of the river, which was considered an act of war.
Since the river has changed its course many times through the years, it is impossible to confirm exactly where the original Rubicon flowed when Julius Caesar crossed it.
Dunno, tombs, duet, or screaming epitaph - maybe. Enjoyable to read, thanx 4 sharin.
I think, if you know what the poem is about, then you might want to think up a title that comes closest to describing that, instead of asking others. IMO
Yes perhaps, but regardless it's still interesting to see what it makes people think of, and there are a couple of good suggestions
I like the poems, as I said earlier. And it's interesting that we both think that Lyrics to a friend doesn't sound like a sufficient title for this.
Lyrics to a Friend isn't a title They literally are lyrics I wrote for my friends band, although I don't think he's going to use them any more. No matter eh?
Hey, do you ever explain your poetry? I'm very curious what stone means in 'I was confined by stone.'
I don't usually, for two reasons. One is that sometimes the true meaning could be quite specific to me, but mainly I like to leave poems open for people to take what they want from it; and interpret it how they wish. Although if you really wanted a breakdown I could probably explain it in a message
If it's not very personal and you have the time I'd like to get that message. Then I could tell you what I make of it myself.
Oh and btw, Janetta has just this to say about her poetry. I once nagged her to explain her poem 'Waves' too.
I sent a brief message to you on the first verse... Although it pained me Imagine some loose tangled string. Those are my thoughts. To write the poem I tie the string in such a way that it can only be undone by cutting it. When I analyse parts of my poems, it's like cutting out one of the loops, and it goes back into my head as random mess... I hope you understand what I meant by that XD
I wouldn't dare suggest a title, but just want to say I was bowled over by this poem. I hope you are a known name in the poetry world; you certainly deserve to be.
I am new to this forum not sure how to 'quote' yet but I thought I will reply my interpretation of this poem.
It seems 2 lovers - one was happy and doing what they wanted - maybe successful, and the other one was not happy. While they still loved each other, they had too many differences so they parted ways. So if this was correct then I'd suggest a title which would describe "to love but to war" or "we love - but we are being pulled apart but other forces".
I hope I don't sound dumb LOL n totally off track
Thanks for taking the time to think about it, I really appreciate that
Well, if that's what you get from it then it's what it means to you That's why I wrote it the way I did, everyone can take their own twist on it, perhaps personal meaning even. I like giving people the chance to imagine, rather than always being set strict boundaries to think to
Thanks for the title suggestions by the way. I have now in fact settled for 'Mercurial Love' but thanks again for taking the time to try and help a fellow hubber out
Oh and under the comment you are viewing there is a small button marked 'quote/reply'
clicking that quotes that comment, then simply write yours underneath
You might try "Heartsleeve Romance".
The attraction of opposites leads to passion, romance and conflict.
Thanks very much to everyone for their suggestions, I have decided upon 'Mercurial Love' for the title, but all your suggestions are brilliant too and much appreciated!
Mercurial Love is completely off. What made you think the poem was about mercurial love?
I thought you might like to think about these titles:
"Parting of the ways"
"Our Wounded Hearts"
""Two Hearts in Jeopardy"
I don't know whether you like these or not but they just came into my head. BB
a thought "To Let Go, and Love!"
"To Let Go, in Love!"
"It's Time To Live and Let Go!"
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